It’s not accurate or fair to say that O’Blennis’s poem is a “variation” of Amann’s. They share similar content (snow, parking lot), but they differ significantly. Having the same subject doesn’t make one poem a variation of the other. Fine that one brought to mind the other, but I don’t consider the new poem any kind of “variation” of the older one. For more on “deja-ku,” see the link provided.
As for who Eric Amann is, he started one of the first influential haiku magazines in 1967, and cofounded Haiku Canada in 1978. Though not without flaws, his Haiku: The Wordless Poem is one of the best books ever written about the art and aesthetics of haiku. He hasn’t published haiku for 25 years but he’s worth knowing about. See http://www.millikin.edu/haiku/writerprofiles/EricAmann.html.
Lovely tension, sweetly poignant, highly observed haiku.
Snow falling
on the empty parking lot:
Christmass eve..
Eric W. Amann
(nice variation Rob)
Thank you Robert.Your haiku brought me into a moment that was sensually alive and full of feeling.
a bend in trail–
sky and lake both brim over
with pink dawn light
never heard of him.
Well done, Robert_! There are soooooo many scribblers of haiku, who can know them all_? Amann fits, I think, into this era:
(paraphrased)
the summer chair
rocking by itself
in the blizzard
*Jack Kerouac*
_M
Thank you R.M. Thank you M.
An unusually rich poem.
Good work. A rare combination of poignancy and grittiness.
Robert, your haiku is so very soulful, lovely, a bit sad, memorable – absolutely beautiful in every way. Thank you for sharing. – Felica Sah
It’s not accurate or fair to say that O’Blennis’s poem is a “variation” of Amann’s. They share similar content (snow, parking lot), but they differ significantly. Having the same subject doesn’t make one poem a variation of the other. Fine that one brought to mind the other, but I don’t consider the new poem any kind of “variation” of the older one. For more on “deja-ku,” see the link provided.
today’s crane
in the midst of the river–
yesterday
–
countless birds on a wire, looking
in different directions
–
(variant of scribbling on wall)
as october snow falls
falls october snow–
snowfalls
Thank you Bill. Thank you Felica.
As for who Eric Amann is, he started one of the first influential haiku magazines in 1967, and cofounded Haiku Canada in 1978. Though not without flaws, his Haiku: The Wordless Poem is one of the best books ever written about the art and aesthetics of haiku. He hasn’t published haiku for 25 years but he’s worth knowing about. See http://www.millikin.edu/haiku/writerprofiles/EricAmann.html.