Carol Raisfeld lives in Long Beach, New York. She was Director of WHChaikumultimedia and has served as Multimedia Editor for World Haiku Review, moderator for WHClovehaiku, Associate Editor and Haiga Editor for Simply Haiku and a member of the editorial board of Modern Haiga. Carol's poetry, art and photography appear worldwide in print, online journals and anthologies.
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Carol – I think your haiku is perfection. No changes needed, in my opinion. I love it because it immediately calls to memory vivid imagery… quite lovely! Thank you for sharing a tiny bit of beauty with us all. -Felica
Great! Really very beautiful. Feels so immediate and vivid. Transports us into the moment and situation. Reminds me of the mood of Issa’s or Chiyo Ni’s haikus. Very wonderful. Thanks for sharing!
I’m a huge fan, Carol, but this one falls a little flat for me. Maybe it’s because I’ve been reading quite a few “silence between” haiku? In any case, it’s great to read you here too.
Minor edit suggestion:
after rain
the silence between
insect songs
Carol – I think your haiku is perfection. No changes needed, in my opinion. I love it because it immediately calls to memory vivid imagery… quite lovely! Thank you for sharing a tiny bit of beauty with us all. -Felica
Great! Really very beautiful. Feels so immediate and vivid. Transports us into the moment and situation. Reminds me of the mood of Issa’s or Chiyo Ni’s haikus. Very wonderful. Thanks for sharing!
I’m a huge fan, Carol, but this one falls a little flat for me. Maybe it’s because I’ve been reading quite a few “silence between” haiku? In any case, it’s great to read you here too.
first drops
the cricket song
skips a beat
evening rain last few drops-
fall in the puddle and
on my forehead
morning rain
polka dots
on the roof
Hi Carol,
I’m late, but wanted to say how
much I enjoyed this…the sensations
are strong!
;)
Lary
This is perfect.
Every silence is unique, Carol, and you’ve added one to my experience.