Such a striking poem. We can all feel the chill of the ice, from our toes up to our heart. I love the choice of the word "blade" which turns something as inocuous and domestic as grass into a weapon. And it is "edged" with frost. This reminds me of the blade Laertes "edges" with poison in his plot to kill Hamlet. Slow release venom. I recall Hamlet and Laertes both perished from the same edged weapon in Shakespeare's play, but not before each made and received a genuine apology from the other.
So much is unspoken in this poem that there is a sense of incompleteness. What is the connection between the grass and "his" apology? Is the start of winter, or the last frost of the season? The uncertainty of context is I believe left there deliberately to let us share the ambivalence of the poet. She as yet has not decided whether the frost will thaw.
This poem has prompted my own response:
Retreating footprints
Mark the frosted lawn
With an ellipsis
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April 8th, 2013 at 8:34 am
What a vivid haiku! I shivered.
April 8th, 2013 at 7:39 pm
Hope the shivers didn't last long. <smile> Thanks, Sheila.
Susan
April 8th, 2013 at 8:41 am
spring thaw
he brings me a branch
cherry blossoms
:-) thank you, Susan!
April 8th, 2013 at 7:36 pm
A great response, Danne. Thanks!
April 8th, 2013 at 9:42 am
Sharp!
April 8th, 2013 at 7:38 pm
Lovely to 'see' you here, Jenny. Thanks so much.
Susan
April 8th, 2013 at 10:06 am
Exquisitely icy!
April 8th, 2013 at 7:37 pm
Thank you, Alison!
Susan
April 8th, 2013 at 10:37 am
Oh wow, Susan – this one packs a punch! :)
marion
April 8th, 2013 at 7:35 pm
Thanks, Marion, for dropping by. Appreciated!
April 8th, 2013 at 4:38 pm
Such a striking poem. We can all feel the chill of the ice, from our toes up to our heart. I love the choice of the word "blade" which turns something as inocuous and domestic as grass into a weapon. And it is "edged" with frost. This reminds me of the blade Laertes "edges" with poison in his plot to kill Hamlet. Slow release venom. I recall Hamlet and Laertes both perished from the same edged weapon in Shakespeare's play, but not before each made and received a genuine apology from the other.
So much is unspoken in this poem that there is a sense of incompleteness. What is the connection between the grass and "his" apology? Is the start of winter, or the last frost of the season? The uncertainty of context is I believe left there deliberately to let us share the ambivalence of the poet. She as yet has not decided whether the frost will thaw.
This poem has prompted my own response:
Retreating footprints
Mark the frosted lawn
With an ellipsis
April 8th, 2013 at 7:34 pm
Thank you for taking so much time, haiku apprentice, with your response. I'm delighted this is working so well for you.
April 10th, 2013 at 11:27 am
Very nice Susan.
April 12th, 2013 at 3:27 pm
Terrific haiku, Susan – Again you prove to us why we look up to you (don't know how tall you are, but you get the drift).
Warren
June 15th, 2013 at 8:38 am
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September 25th, 2016 at 10:13 am
Hi! This is kind of off topic but I need some guidance from an established blog. Is it hard to set up your own blog? I’m not very techincal but I can figure things out pretty fast. I’m thinking about making my own but I’m not sure where to start. Do you have any points or suggestions? Many thanks