Very nice. I must say though, it mirrors the style of E. E. Cummings greatly! The way it is written and worded… If I didn’t know better I might’ve thought it WAS one of his! Lol
Very well done!
Wonderful Dave! As aesthetically beautiful as it is poetically. And I'm so glad the Tinywords html code formatting was able to preserve all the nuance as well as the visual charm of this one.
January 15th, 2016 at 12:48 pm
I love this. Sexy!
January 15th, 2016 at 1:05 pm
Leaves me speechless!
January 15th, 2016 at 1:10 pm
the candle flickers—
soft piano plays
outside
January 15th, 2016 at 1:32 pm
So creative. Unique style…and so understood yet open to pondering. Exciting to see the venture out of norms.
January 15th, 2016 at 2:21 pm
An elegant and evocative concrete poem!
January 15th, 2016 at 2:46 pm
Dave,
Love your creative haiku!
OUTDOOR DRAMA
Bali beach
full moon on
full moon
January 15th, 2016 at 3:00 pm
Clever concrete ku, Dave! :)
marion
January 15th, 2016 at 3:05 pm
Nicely done
her red kimono
slipping off her shoulder . . .
she lets it
Bill Kenney
January 15th, 2016 at 3:33 pm
Very nice. I must say though, it mirrors the style of E. E. Cummings greatly! The way it is written and worded… If I didn’t know better I might’ve thought it WAS one of his! Lol
Very well done!
January 15th, 2016 at 4:37 pm
Great piece!
January 15th, 2016 at 7:05 pm
Thanks everyone. I appreciate all of your kind comments.
January 16th, 2016 at 2:34 am
Wonderful Dave! As aesthetically beautiful as it is poetically. And I'm so glad the Tinywords html code formatting was able to preserve all the nuance as well as the visual charm of this one.
Strider
January 16th, 2016 at 5:45 am
oh yeah, poetry's supposed to be fun
January 16th, 2016 at 10:26 pm
Wonderful; I can see her shape as well as the dress.
January 17th, 2016 at 12:02 pm
Great concrete haiku… well done!
May 27th, 2016 at 10:44 am
Visual wizardry. And a concrete poem.