Welcome Jill and a lovely debut haiku here on Tinywords!
I really enjoy the sense of breathlessness that comes from the break between the first and second line, especially when reading this verse out loud. It really brought the experience of bushwalking back to me.
April 27th, 2016 at 9:18 am
Love the playfulness of this haiku. Know where I'd be…
April 27th, 2016 at 9:28 am
Very fun, Jill! Yes, I've often been sidetracked with berry picking. This haiku has me looking forward to summer. Thanks!
April 27th, 2016 at 9:41 am
I would be right there as well! Lovely haiku.
April 27th, 2016 at 11:51 am
A hiker after my own heart. Love the gently humor in this one.
April 27th, 2016 at 12:12 pm
Thank you for the smiles. I love this one!
April 27th, 2016 at 1:22 pm
Delicious.
April 27th, 2016 at 2:44 pm
This one made me smile in a couple different ways. Love the cheekiness of it along with the appreciation of nature.
April 27th, 2016 at 3:07 pm
Love it.
April 27th, 2016 at 3:23 pm
wonderful!
April 27th, 2016 at 3:56 pm
all day hike
the cloud covered sun
lost in time
April 27th, 2016 at 9:50 pm
A delight!
April 28th, 2016 at 1:44 am
Welcome Jill and a lovely debut haiku here on Tinywords!
I really enjoy the sense of breathlessness that comes from the break between the first and second line, especially when reading this verse out loud. It really brought the experience of bushwalking back to me.
Looking forward to more of your works in future.
Strider
April 28th, 2016 at 4:38 am
"Serious hikers" – what a great clause
This is a wonderful poem on multiple layers
– Jim Ellis
April 28th, 2016 at 7:13 am
Thanks All for your comments. Feels so fine sharing a moment with others who really “get it.”
April 28th, 2016 at 10:01 am
Love this! I always brake for berries on the trail :)
April 29th, 2016 at 12:46 pm
Another hiker bites the dust…or rather, raspberries. Love this one, Jill.
May 23rd, 2016 at 4:20 am
There is a hint of naughtiness in this that I adore! :)
marion