this life
paper boats
on a stream

7 Responses

  1. Peggy Bilbro Says:

    Nice one, David.

  2. Alan Summers Says:

    this life
    paper boats
    on a stream

    —DAVID OATES

    Ah, reminds me of the famous song "row row row your boat merrily down the stream …Life is but a Dream" and also something from Kabir as well, where we are like paper boats that float until they slowly dissolve in the water.

    .
    .
    Itadakimasu
    love letters on blue paper
    to every soul fed

    Alan Summers
    EarthRise Rolling Haiku Collaboration 2016 Foodcrop Haiku (The Haiku Foundation)
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  3. carol jones Says:

    this life
    paper boats
    on a stream
    – David Oates

    Mmm, how fragile our journey through life.
    Marvellous verse.

  4. Pravat Says:

    Beautiful ku with minimalistic expression. It reminds me of my haiku:

    first rain
    the paper boat carries
    my childhood

    Pravat Kumar Padhy

    Publication Credits: Asahi Haikuist Network 31.5.2013
    Butter Fly Dream Anthology, 2013

    *****
    paper boat
    the old man unfolds
    his memories

    Pravat Kumar Padhy

    Publication Credit: Otata 19, July 2017

    Nicely crafted with subtle philosophical touch.

  5. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Yes, David. We are carried along with the flow of everything – nature, everyday living…how much choice do we really have?

    Marion

  6. Marilyn Walker Says:

    a good one, David!

  7. Norman Darlington Says:

    All the precious ephemerality of this life, nicely captured.

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