this life
paper boats
on a stream

7 Responses

  1. Peggy Bilbro Says:

    Nice one, David.

  2. Alan Summers Says:

    this life
    paper boats
    on a stream


    Ah, reminds me of the famous song "row row row your boat merrily down the stream …Life is but a Dream" and also something from Kabir as well, where we are like paper boats that float until they slowly dissolve in the water.

    love letters on blue paper
    to every soul fed

    Alan Summers
    EarthRise Rolling Haiku Collaboration 2016 Foodcrop Haiku (The Haiku Foundation)

  3. carol jones Says:

    this life
    paper boats
    on a stream
    – David Oates

    Mmm, how fragile our journey through life.
    Marvellous verse.

  4. Pravat Says:

    Beautiful ku with minimalistic expression. It reminds me of my haiku:

    first rain
    the paper boat carries
    my childhood

    Pravat Kumar Padhy

    Publication Credits: Asahi Haikuist Network 31.5.2013
    Butter Fly Dream Anthology, 2013

    paper boat
    the old man unfolds
    his memories

    Pravat Kumar Padhy

    Publication Credit: Otata 19, July 2017

    Nicely crafted with subtle philosophical touch.

  5. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Yes, David. We are carried along with the flow of everything – nature, everyday living…how much choice do we really have?


  6. Marilyn Walker Says:

    a good one, David!

  7. Norman Darlington Says:

    All the precious ephemerality of this life, nicely captured.

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