Thank you Margarita.
I really like this haiku!
What a wonderful opening. What joys it conjures up of childhood; of circuses and fairs. The hurdy-gurdy music. Darkness and garish coloured lights. Scents of popcorn and fairy-floss and hotdogs. I remember standing in the carousel queue waiting for my turn, watching the rides go around, and choosing which horse would be my mount, looking them each in the eye, before rushing onto the platform and claiming my steed.
The tame round-and-round, up-and-down of the carousel is matched by the regular 5-5-5 syllable construction of the poem. But the extra syllables are not missing, they are hidden there in the wild joy of the rider. Ah, indeed there is a wild gleam in that painted eye.
April 5th, 2013 at 2:28 pm
oh, this is the best…memories of carousel horses…
April 5th, 2013 at 3:09 pm
Wonderful! I am forwarding this to my friend William Dentzel III, who builds carousels, his family tradition.
April 5th, 2013 at 10:52 pm
strongly felt… the wildness and the wonder!! thank you!
your eye
in my eye
rainbow's end
April 6th, 2013 at 12:42 am
Thank you Margarita.
I really like this haiku!
What a wonderful opening. What joys it conjures up of childhood; of circuses and fairs. The hurdy-gurdy music. Darkness and garish coloured lights. Scents of popcorn and fairy-floss and hotdogs. I remember standing in the carousel queue waiting for my turn, watching the rides go around, and choosing which horse would be my mount, looking them each in the eye, before rushing onto the platform and claiming my steed.
The tame round-and-round, up-and-down of the carousel is matched by the regular 5-5-5 syllable construction of the poem. But the extra syllables are not missing, they are hidden there in the wild joy of the rider. Ah, indeed there is a wild gleam in that painted eye.
April 6th, 2013 at 5:42 am
Margarita:
A real beauty – thanks,
Don @ Lilliput Review
April 6th, 2013 at 7:27 am
Love it – a hint of life in the old horse!
April 10th, 2013 at 11:27 am
Excellent.
April 23rd, 2013 at 2:28 am
Margarita's special voice, which is also present in her many novels-in-verse.