well,
going through the archives when i stumbled
upon your piece. not bad not great, kinda
tepid like the weather that spawns dandeelions.
just being honest.
tornado watch…
the first dandelion blooms
in the perennial garden
“dandelions just higher than the grass” is
a very good line. but tell me, what exactly is
“a bright breeze?” is it a breeze that lifts one’s
spirits? certainly it is not a breeze with color,
or is it?
‘a bright breeze’ – yes it’s a spring breeze – one that does lift our spirits – interestingly in workshop with young children the majority identify ‘bright breeze’ as perhaps being a spring breeze – despite this not being aterm that they’ve met before – it is a traditional spring kigo in Japanese haiku.
gentle breeze~ ~ ~
scent from field of taraxacum officinal
blows by
well,
going through the archives when i stumbled
upon your piece. not bad not great, kinda
tepid like the weather that spawns dandeelions.
just being honest.
tornado watch…
the first dandelion blooms
in the perennial garden
“dandelions just higher than the grass” is
a very good line. but tell me, what exactly is
“a bright breeze?” is it a breeze that lifts one’s
spirits? certainly it is not a breeze with color,
or is it?
poppies
an orange breeze
dances in my eyes
hi prado,
‘a bright breeze’ – yes it’s a spring breeze – one that does lift our spirits – interestingly in workshop with young children the majority identify ‘bright breeze’ as perhaps being a spring breeze – despite this not being aterm that they’ve met before – it is a traditional spring kigo in Japanese haiku.
spring somewhere…
–
chill, this rainy night
time stands still
even moves backward