under a spring moon
my neighbours air
their dirty laundry
Published by
Graham Nunn
Graham Nunn is a Queensland born poet who has had haiku published in international journals paper wasp and yellow moon and on tinywords.com. Recently he received a highly commended in the Seed Pearls International Yellow Moon Literary Competition, for his haiku. He also recently won the Yellow Moon renga competition writing with Rowan Donovan and the 2002 Jack Stamm haiku competiton.
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interesting haiku, but as someone said, “it reads akin to a sentence”.
spring moon
airing dirty laundry…
neighbours
“thinking out loud
adds to din
earplugs in hand”
and rather verbose.
graham, creates the imagery, but so does anything else, if enough words are used.
your thoughts were good, graham, though i ponder over how much thought was given to it’s composition.
wondering, what is “it”, “guy” loves.
again, i was in agreement with stella, until she stated, “well done”. perhaps, just perhaps, a valid thought, she was completing her dinner order, as she reviewed graham’s work. might i suggest the merlot.
Love it, love it. :)
This haiku is good. I see a Jerry Springer moment in it. Well done.
interesting haiku, but as someone said, “it reads akin to a sentence”.
spring moon
airing dirty laundry…
neighbours
“thinking out loud
adds to din
earplugs in hand”
and rather verbose.
graham, creates the imagery, but so does anything else, if enough words are used.
your thoughts were good, graham, though i ponder over how much thought was given to it’s composition.
wondering, what is “it”, “guy” loves.
again, i was in agreement with stella, until she stated, “well done”. perhaps, just perhaps, a valid thought, she was completing her dinner order, as she reviewed graham’s work. might i suggest the merlot.
Good image.
realising that i watch
the moon more on films
than in the sky
dropping her ring
beneath the coffee table —
overlooked black sox