Allen McGill
Allen McGill
San Miguel de Allende, Mexico
aljons at yahoo.com
Originally from NYC, Allen lives, writes, acts and directs theatre in Mexico. His published fiction, non-fiction, poetry, plays, etc., have appeared in print as well as on line: NY Times, The Writer, Newsday, Retrozine, Laughter Loaf, Flashquake, Herons Nest, Cenotaph, TempsLibres, Autumn Leaves, Poetic Voices,Amaze-Cinquain, Bottle Rocket, Frogpond, Modern Haiku, World Haiku Review, many others.
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I like the combination of colour and contrast in elements this makes the haiku work. It is a basic/classic solution that works. Soft and hard, pale and stark, etc. Thanks for sharing – Deborah
a cactus bloom’s
yellow translucence
these first two lines “had” me mesmerized.
then, i read the third line. i felt as though i didn’t see the truck coming; road kill came to mind.
“translucence”: allowing light to pass through, however, not allowing forms or colors of objects
to be distinctly visible.
i am in agreement with deborah on her analysis of
colour, contrast, basic, classic, soft, hard, pale and stark.
but, i fail to see the connection.
the third line seems to have been left out on a limb.
a thought comes to mind:
a cactus bloom’s
yellow translucence…
blacktop highway’s center line
desert cactuses
triumphant atheletes
raise their fists
in the crack
reaching cross the pale sidewalk …
a yellow flowering weed
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