This one is worth pondering over. It is well seen and a little sad to think summer has past. It works well for me Margaret, is more of your work online?
reading others’ work, they can cause you to grow, especially when you spot the (do)s and (don’t)s
i can appreciate margaret’s words, in my teen years, i worked with a carnival, operating the rides.
i watched the rides being assembled and dismantled, but never thought it to be fun; along with the riders becoming sick
in spite of all this, there was always the laughter
at first, i was rather perplexed in reading margaret’s creation; prior to reading craig’s comment, “…pondering over. it is well seen…”, then, there was something for me to make a comparison to.
there’s more i want to say about margaret’s haiku, but not on this outing
Thank you, Margaret. I just read your other haiku on tinywords and will reread them. “Summer twilight” is a nice complement to today’s work.
In this poem, the first two lines cause the reader to wonder what is being experienced, and the third line answers. I’m going to try this with moments recorded in my practice notebooks. By continuing to read, I’ll know when an observation becomes a poem.
This one is worth pondering over. It is well seen and a little sad to think summer has past. It works well for me Margaret, is more of your work online?
“i don’t know if i’ve
settled down or not but I’m
not moving for now
if it’s worth reading
once it’s worth reading twice so
You know where to start”
haiku/haikus by
charles henri ford
i used charles, not to indicate he’s on my “best read list”, merely to show how others think.
now, that’s a funny thing.
“the challenge of haiku is to put the poem’s meaning and imagery in the reader’s mind in only seventeen syllables”
“themes include nature, feelings, or experiences; usually they use simple words and grammar”
i have read the haiku presented in many forms, some thinking if it follows the structuring it’s a haiku, yet, i wonder where’s the substance.
“substance”, i like the theology application:
“that in which the divine attributes inhere”
it’s when i read the masters, of old, am i moved. as the trite saying goes, “they make it seem so easy, and it’s fulfilling”.
more…
in addition to…
reading others’ work, they can cause you to grow, especially when you spot the (do)s and (don’t)s
i can appreciate margaret’s words, in my teen years, i worked with a carnival, operating the rides.
i watched the rides being assembled and dismantled, but never thought it to be fun; along with the riders becoming sick
in spite of all this, there was always the laughter
at first, i was rather perplexed in reading margaret’s creation; prior to reading craig’s comment, “…pondering over. it is well seen…”, then, there was something for me to make a comparison to.
there’s more i want to say about margaret’s haiku, but not on this outing
Thank you, Margaret. I just read your other haiku on tinywords and will reread them. “Summer twilight” is a nice complement to today’s work.
In this poem, the first two lines cause the reader to wonder what is being experienced, and the third line answers. I’m going to try this with moments recorded in my practice notebooks. By continuing to read, I’ll know when an observation becomes a poem.
Stepping off
the merry-go-round
resignation
a funny thought:
i pondered “passive, accepting, uncomplaining, along with composed, being the next ones in line”