Margaret: I like this. Very visual – could be a painting. Also like the juxtaposition of sight & sound. Reply
-a beautifully phrased poem filling the mind with sound, color, and the interesting concept of smoke traveling down. I enjoy how “train” appears as the caboose of the poem, trailing a small segment of train-like rhythm. Nicely written! Reply
Margaret: I like this. Very visual – could
be a painting. Also like the juxtaposition
of sight & sound.
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were you talking to me…
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-a beautifully phrased poem filling the mind with sound, color, and the interesting concept of smoke traveling down. I enjoy how “train” appears as the caboose of the poem, trailing a small segment of train-like rhythm. Nicely written!
morn
mist descends
on the road like milk
black-grey clouds –
after the summer storm
commuter traffic-jam
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