at the end of a blind date the soft clicking of our eyeglass frames Published by Ed Markowski Ed Markowski writes and paints in America's Great Lakes Region. View all posts by Ed Markowski
I really like the “zen moment” within this haiku, but I think some excess words are diluting what could otherwise be a very, very effective poem. end of a blind date the soft clicking of eyeglass frames Just suggestions, of course! :) Reply
__________ TO ED, THE “SOFT CLICKING”, VERY NICE. THIS ONE IS NOT JUST NICE, WHETHER YOU KNOW IT OR NOT, THIS ONE BELONGS IN THE GREAT CLASS. CONGRATULATIONS. ____ I AM W.E.G. Reply
dancing …as if
we had known
each other for years
over espresso–
her asl hands sign
with boston accent
analyzing gallery painting
the artist speaks to me
…now I paint abstracts
cooing doves
light rain and breeze in a dance …
at the beginning of the night
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I really like the “zen moment” within this haiku, but I think some excess words are diluting what could otherwise be a very, very effective poem.
end of a blind date
the soft clicking
of eyeglass frames
Just suggestions, of course! :)
love portion
she works to improve her english
to win him over
__________ TO ED, THE “SOFT CLICKING”, VERY
NICE. THIS ONE IS NOT JUST NICE, WHETHER YOU KNOW IT OR NOT, THIS ONE BELONGS IN THE GREAT CLASS.
CONGRATULATIONS.
____ I AM W.E.G.
menu indecision
LARGE WORDS
through the magnifying glass
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