Alan's haiku and poetry is published in over 60 anthologies, and a number of languages. He regularly reads, performs, and workshops from venues as diverse as possible including shop windows; inner city rainforests; cliff tops; to the more orthodox places...on occasion. His website is: http://www.withwords.org.uk
Contact: alan at withwords dot org dot uk
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an old attempt:
spring campus
the wind shapes the sound
through the trees
an old attempt:
spring campus
the wind shapes the sound
through the trees
nice poem, but “the wind has also shaped
a tree” sounds a bit smoother. just a
suggestion.
Hi sylvain!
Thanks for comments, but in this case I deliberately choose “a wind” to show that it isn’t the same ‘wind’ necessarily.
But as with all good constructive comments I will definitely put it in my comments bank, and look closely at both options for a future collection.
white sails …
the wind has also shaped
a tree
With much appreciation,
Alan
i love this ku since i read it the first time (Mainichi, 2005)
That’s a fantastic way of looking at it.
Thanks for all the kind comments both on here, and via private emails, I really appreciate all the comments.
This is still a surprise hit for me, but it certainly has grown on me.
unfurled sail~
her red scarf
captured by the wind
her flowing black hair
A windswept hawthorn looking back, out to sea on a coastal path.
Yes I see it.
Thank you
regards,
jerry
feeling the wind in my salted bearded cheeks-
her hands