Anthony,
I loved this haiku! I edit a print magazine, The Poet’s Art. Visit my website (http://www.freewebs.com/thepoetsart/) for contact info if you are interested in submitting.
Yours truly,
David Fox
anthony,
good poem. i wonder though if the first line
should be the third. works either way though.
there’s a town in northern kentucky named
rabbit hatch. it’s about 40 miles northeast
of louisville. drank a bunch of beer on the
steps of the general store, which composes
the entirety of the town.
our identical twins
in reversible jackets…
spring snow
Thanks for the positive responses to this haiku..the double dash was a mistake(possibly to much caffeine)It was supposed to be a single. Looking at it again, I have to agree with Angelika, that it would work without any punctuation at all. Again thanks for the responses and constructive critisism
Anthony and all — a double dash is a traditional substitute for an em dash, which is what properly belongs at the end of that line. I’ve changed the typography so it’s correct now. I agree it would work with no punctuation, but I prefer it this way!
this repetition of violet (violet/more violet) and the contrast to silver is very interesting
i don`t need any punctuation in this ku
brilliant sunset *
bougainvillaea in bloom
though redder
I inhale–
drunk with the scent of
late blooming lilacs
The colors suck
more being out of
twilight.
Anthony,
I loved this haiku! I edit a print magazine, The Poet’s Art. Visit my website (http://www.freewebs.com/thepoetsart/) for contact info if you are interested in submitting.
Yours truly,
David Fox
One from winter 2005:
evergreens
more green today—
sun after snow
anthony,
good poem. i wonder though if the first line
should be the third. works either way though.
there’s a town in northern kentucky named
rabbit hatch. it’s about 40 miles northeast
of louisville. drank a bunch of beer on the
steps of the general store, which composes
the entirety of the town.
our identical twins
in reversible jackets…
spring snow
sylvain
Hey Bill,
I really like your haiku, what about this?…
evergreens
more green today-
sunlit snow
Just a thought, although it may be better left as is…I like it either way.
Collin
Dearest Anthony,
thanks for making me smile.
I like them lines.
I think you like violet.
Whats the color just before (or after) violet called?
the blue in the clouds –
the color just before black.
tells all about me
Hello Anthony,I enjoyed your poem.Not the usual 5/7/5 I was taught, but I liked the content.Nice job, Darleen
Thanks for the positive responses to this haiku..the double dash was a mistake(possibly to much caffeine)It was supposed to be a single. Looking at it again, I have to agree with Angelika, that it would work without any punctuation at all. Again thanks for the responses and constructive critisism
Anthony and all — a double dash is a traditional substitute for an em dash, which is what properly belongs at the end of that line. I’ve changed the typography so it’s correct now. I agree it would work with no punctuation, but I prefer it this way!
dft
some may yet misunderstand the (&mdash)
(em) being a variable measure of print type;
type being letter size(ex. pica)
&mdash, some understand to be the doubling in length/width of the dash(-)
some say the dash being the width of the letter (m), capitalized.
conceivably future keyboards will carry this symbol
—
star on the horizon&mdash
finding my way home
in the dark