thunderstorm a young couple argue under an umbrella Published by Kara Burns Kara Burns: kb at karaburns dot com View all posts by Kara Burns
“a young couple” oh, there will be more `thunderstorms` in the future… i like your haiku, Kara! Reply
so simple and to the point… it reminds me an old ku of mine: thunderstorm– a spider’s hidding from my eyes Reply
Hopefully by the time the storm is over, their argument will be, also. To paraphrase your ku somewhat . . . Thunderstorm under an umbrella a young couple kiss. Reply
Nice one Kara, I think the poetic irony in your image is quite poignant, and unstated yet suggestive, which is the mark of good poetry; expecially with haiku, subtlety in always the key. Basho would have nodded sagely at your haiku. Reply
It looks like there is a thunderstorm above and and under the umbrella:)
“a young couple”
oh, there will be more `thunderstorms` in the future…
i like your haiku, Kara!
thunder outside
inside
missing you
[first published: “Poetry Monthly”]
– the prequel/sequel?
so simple and to the point… it reminds me an old ku of mine:
thunderstorm–
a spider’s hidding
from my eyes
Human nature as piece of nature.
Well done.
Very enjoyable haiku, I can picture and hear it all now! ;-)
Hopefully by the time the storm is over, their argument will be, also.
To paraphrase your ku somewhat . . .
Thunderstorm
under an umbrella
a young couple kiss.
Nice one Kara, I think the poetic irony in your image is quite poignant, and unstated yet suggestive, which is the mark of good poetry; expecially with haiku, subtlety in always the key. Basho would have nodded sagely at your haiku.
twi_ig_t r_inb_w
her smile dampens
his weather-beaten brow