Jeffrey Woodward is an American citizen who permanently resides in Windsor, Ontario, Canada but commutes daily to his employment in Detroit. His critical articles and poems (in both Eastern and Western genres) appear widely in online and hardcopy publications in North America, Europe, Asia and Australia. His selected poems will be published later in 2007.
Email: j_l_woodward at yahoo dot com
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At first, this was a slippery-when-wet kind of poem for me. But then I realized that you had a very angry cloud above you, so angry that even its edges could scarcely hide it. Very nicely done!
city lights
irradiate a surging cloud
tempest rising
city lights
pierce a heaving cloud—
splatter pattern
A very beautiful poem! Thank you for sharing it. I admire the prosody, the alliteration “even / evening” and the very suggestive juxtaposition between the dusk and the flameless combustion.
I hadn’t realized 3-5-3 syllable haiku was a “perfect” style of haiku until a good friend of mine (also a poet) told me. I find both this form and the 5-7-5 variety challenging but fun to write. Well done!
~David Fox
P.S. To Dylan — I know there are many ways a haiku can be written in, but these are the only two “traditional” ways I know of.
david, too often tradition leads to stagnancy. if all things and thoughts were forced to adhere to these “handing downs” where would we be. (to me), that which is traditional provides a foundation upon which we can build, and even tear down, however the latter reaks havoc, yet growth.
albeit aren’t most things personal…
–
last of the pink apple
this black seed–
planted once more
Hot.
Yes, indeed!
My clouds smolder too.
Good haiku!
Thanks!
At first, this was a slippery-when-wet kind of poem for me. But then I realized that you had a very angry cloud above you, so angry that even its edges could scarcely hide it. Very nicely done!
city lights
irradiate a surging cloud
tempest rising
city lights
pierce a heaving cloud—
splatter pattern
A very beautiful poem! Thank you for sharing it. I admire the prosody, the alliteration “even / evening” and the very suggestive juxtaposition between the dusk and the flameless combustion.
I hadn’t realized 3-5-3 syllable haiku was a “perfect” style of haiku until a good friend of mine (also a poet) told me. I find both this form and the 5-7-5 variety challenging but fun to write. Well done!
~David Fox
P.S. To Dylan — I know there are many ways a haiku can be written in, but these are the only two “traditional” ways I know of.
david, too often tradition leads to stagnancy. if all things and thoughts were forced to adhere to these “handing downs” where would we be. (to me), that which is traditional provides a foundation upon which we can build, and even tear down, however the latter reaks havoc, yet growth.
albeit aren’t most things personal…
–
last of the pink apple
this black seed–
planted once more
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I like the use of “Even” in LINE ONE it introduces and resonates well with LINE THREE
much love
gillena
The surprise in Line 3 makes for a very exciting finish. Wonderful haiku.