august wind
a sparrow re-rights itself
at the peanut cage
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Alan Summers
Alan's haiku and poetry is published in over 60 anthologies, and a number of languages. He regularly reads, performs, and workshops from venues as diverse as possible including shop windows; inner city rainforests; cliff tops; to the more orthodox places...on occasion. His website is: http://www.withwords.org.uk
Contact: alan at withwords dot org dot uk
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This haiku remind me of some Issa’s haiku about sparrows.Although it refers about a bird, is a very human haiku. For this reason I written the follow reply:
In the old cage
it is not more place for
the sparrow’s wings
Hi Alan, I love the waver of the moment here!
And while I’m not quite sure what a peanut
cage is, I’m guessing it’s a type of bird feeder?
It’s so interesting to get these global glimpses…
I feed our birds sunflower seeds, but have never
put out peanuts.
;)
Lary
alan, first thought, my usage of (irregardless); some think it totally inappropriate. yet, it has a place and usage for effectively making a point.
(re-rights) enhances the visual of the sparrow’s ongoing actions.
there are times i’ll pronounce the “t” at the end of escargo(t); some think me boorish…
I find your haiku quite interesting, I would never have though “irregularity” would go with haiku, but you have done it! Very haiku humour, I hope you submit it to Tinywords! ;-)
This catches the essence of sparrowness.
This haiku remind me of some Issa’s haiku about sparrows.Although it refers about a bird, is a very human haiku. For this reason I written the follow reply:
In the old cage
it is not more place for
the sparrow’s wings
Wonderful, Alan! I have such a fondness for the little city sparrows that visit my tiny front yard in all sorts of weather….
Hi Alan, I love the waver of the moment here!
And while I’m not quite sure what a peanut
cage is, I’m guessing it’s a type of bird feeder?
It’s so interesting to get these global glimpses…
I feed our birds sunflower seeds, but have never
put out peanuts.
;)
Lary
winter branch
the roundness of the sparrow
in the wind
Thank you Bill, Vasile, larylee, and martin for the comments, and for the complementary haiku!
Yes, a peanut cage is indeed a bird feeder, and simply means it was a dedicated peanut feeder, as was the sparrow! ;-)
alan, first thought, my usage of (irregardless); some think it totally inappropriate. yet, it has a place and usage for effectively making a point.
(re-rights) enhances the visual of the sparrow’s ongoing actions.
there are times i’ll pronounce the “t” at the end of escargo(t); some think me boorish…
–
this dawn’s
irregularity–
having cereal
Thanks b.m.!
I find your haiku quite interesting, I would never have though “irregularity” would go with haiku, but you have done it! Very haiku humour, I hope you submit it to Tinywords! ;-)
Very Good Haiku ! Thank you Alan Summers! Thank you Vasile and Bob too!