still pond –
I write my name in water
with a dry stick
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For awhile I was thinking that this was a deja-ku. Then I realized that it was part of a group of haiku that was recently posted to haikutalk mailing list by someone who I think is probably a fairly new haiku poet. If I remember correctly, this was the best of the bunch. I really like it.
For awhile I was thinking that this was a deja-ku. Then I realized that it was part of a group of haiku that was recently posted to haikutalk mailing list by someone who I think is probably a fairly new haiku poet. If I remember correctly, this was the best of the bunch. I really like it.
You’re right. I too liked it. I was trying to find Sheila’s comments on the earlier toast haiku, which gave better versions.
This one I like as is! ;-)
creative, munzar, though i felt something escaping while reading “with a dry stick”.
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still waters
my name flows from the stick
to what depths
Wow! Great, and the dry stick open meanings and meanings.
good haiku, munzar
still water
I reach down and touch
a cloud
Writing haiku…
on the pond mirror
a goose feather
I like the “dry stick” in the water, contrasting dry and wet, making me think of where the stick was found.