I like the line break after "came." It leaves us expecting the worst. I'm reminded of the old saying, "Our worst fears lie in anticipation." Such is the case in this haiku. The storm clouds pass, nothing happens, and the relief we feel floods us like an "evening birdsong." Very nice.
Baton Rouge sunset–
they say it's pollution,
but how beautiful!
There is a definite feeling that clouds have just lifted, that there has been silence during a dark period but now the birds are singing once again and all is well. Lovely!
August 21st, 2013 at 10:30 am
Wonderful haiku!
after rain light shines through tears on windows
Ellen
August 21st, 2013 at 11:53 am
Lovely poem – fears and expectations and – birdsong!
August 21st, 2013 at 12:09 pm
I like the line break after "came." It leaves us expecting the worst. I'm reminded of the old saying, "Our worst fears lie in anticipation." Such is the case in this haiku. The storm clouds pass, nothing happens, and the relief we feel floods us like an "evening birdsong." Very nice.
Baton Rouge sunset–
they say it's pollution,
but how beautiful!
August 22nd, 2013 at 3:09 am
I like this so much. Lovely contrasts of image and emotion.
August 22nd, 2013 at 3:31 am
There is a definite feeling that clouds have just lifted, that there has been silence during a dark period but now the birds are singing once again and all is well. Lovely!
marion
August 22nd, 2013 at 9:50 am
evening birdsong
the storm clouds that came
to nothing
—Thomas Powell
I like the atmosphere that is evoked here for the reader, that's always very generous.
Alan, With Words