A fine poem, either an expertly executed senryu, or a haiku with both poignancy and humor. Either way it's a winner! :-)
christmas morning heat –
two fledgling mudpie larks
pecking cobwebs
Alan Summers
Publications credits: Blithe Spirit Vol. 7 No. 1 Feb 1997; sundog haiku journal: an australian year sunfast press 1997 reprinted 1998 California State Library – Main Catalog Call Number : HAIKU S852su 1997; de facto 2, issue 2. (2008)
Composed in Queensland, Australia, where Christmas is cold for an hour or two at best.
:-)
July 11th, 2014 at 1:17 pm
The perfect "Christmas in July" image! Love it. Perfectly captured.
July 11th, 2014 at 2:41 pm
Yes, I can see the outline of the tree in the bonfire. Love the mixing of the seasons here.
July 12th, 2014 at 12:42 am
Nice.
July 12th, 2014 at 6:10 am
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A fine poem, either an expertly executed senryu, or a haiku with both poignancy and humor. Either way it's a winner! :-)
christmas morning heat –
two fledgling mudpie larks
pecking cobwebs
Alan Summers
Publications credits: Blithe Spirit Vol. 7 No. 1 Feb 1997; sundog haiku journal: an australian year sunfast press 1997 reprinted 1998 California State Library – Main Catalog Call Number : HAIKU S852su 1997; de facto 2, issue 2. (2008)
Composed in Queensland, Australia, where Christmas is cold for an hour or two at best.
:-)
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July 24th, 2014 at 3:40 pm
Thank you Alan. Interesting to get the Southern hemisphere perspective in your haiku!
July 22nd, 2014 at 12:42 pm
I love everything about this, from the surprise of the first lime!
marion
July 22nd, 2014 at 12:42 pm
Oops – 'line'!
July 24th, 2014 at 3:37 pm
Thanks to everyone for the thoughtful and appreciative comments!