I really like how the narrator's viewpoint shifts from the vastness of a canyon stream down to a tiny slit of water in the river bed, and the fact it is 'a slit of clear sky' opens this up again. Lovely.
Startling shifts of perspective. That slit of sky is wonderful. For a moment it almost reads as though the scene is being viewed through a gap in the rocks. The reality is just as arresting.
November 6th, 2015 at 1:58 pm
Nice visuals.
eagle eye—
two landscapes joined
by a pulling thread
November 6th, 2015 at 2:01 pm
dry riverbed – the rainy season fills the farmer's calendar
November 6th, 2015 at 2:25 pm
Dear Jane,
Terrific!
canyon stream
dried to a slit
of clear sky
(included in A Dictionary of Haiku, AHA Books, 2013)
—JANE REICHHOLD
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rain on the river the jesus star shifting
Alan Summers
Publications credits: Janice M Bostok Haiku Prize 2012 Anthology Evening Breeze
November 6th, 2015 at 2:26 pm
Jane, I wasn't surprised to see this was your work. You have a way of nailing a moment. Another perfect haiku.
November 6th, 2015 at 3:03 pm
Beautiful haiku, Jane, that lets us view the world through your poetic eye and be transformed by it.
November 6th, 2015 at 3:08 pm
Great to see you here, Jane :)
I really like how the narrator's viewpoint shifts from the vastness of a canyon stream down to a tiny slit of water in the river bed, and the fact it is 'a slit of clear sky' opens this up again. Lovely.
marion
November 6th, 2015 at 3:48 pm
Startling shifts of perspective. That slit of sky is wonderful. For a moment it almost reads as though the scene is being viewed through a gap in the rocks. The reality is just as arresting.
Jo McInerney
November 9th, 2015 at 1:27 am
Was just came to knew about haiku and i like this one. Now i'm understanding how a haiku is formed.
November 9th, 2015 at 8:26 am
Lovely – although I live in a different area, I can see this poem. Thank you.
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