hothouse roses
without a scent
those words
of comfort
you almost offered


8 Responses

  1. Mary Stevens Says:

    Brilliant juxtaposition, Joan! Love this tanka.

  2. RIVER MALCOLM Says:

    Joan, love the metaphor and the emotional impact. Thanks.

  3. papagreenbean Says:

    Wow! Great Like Dylan's Positively 4th Street.

  4. Carole Says:

    Right on target! I'll remember this one for long time!

  5. Jim Runkle Says:

    Excellent.
    Smiling. Think I've been there.
    Best, Jim

  6. Mojde Says:

    Beautiful!

    The wind of autumn
    Sings …
    And the leaves ,
    Fall …

  7. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Great tension in this one.

    marion

  8. martin1223 Says:

    disappearing ripples
    on the Eucalyptus forest
    laughing Kookaburra

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