I didn't know if this would work but I felt it captured how a Japanese haiku writer or renku writer might feel and act. Although we cannot get close to kigo in our non-Japanese haiku and renku, we can at least attempt the flavor, and see that happens!
Great! But don't worry if you can't, as writers/poets/artists have daily deadlines and we can't make them all.
I have enough accepted work already for a fantastic first issue, though it'd be lovely to see your name there.
No worries if it doesn't happen, but if you can it's a MAXIMUM of THREE HAIKU, and only a single haiku may be accepted. So no one has more poems in an issue than another person.
Hands down the best poem I have read in a while. Breathtaking (pun intended) The image this one conjures for me is a gunmetal sky on the backdrop of a Clint Eastwood movie!
I love what you said:
"Hands down the best poem I have read in a while. Breathtaking (pun intended)."
thunder
I slide a kigo
into the gun
—ALAN SUMMERS
Yep, I guess so! Thunder (? Kaminari) is a Summer kigo:
"thunder" by itself is a kigo for all Summer, and Eastwood's Spaghetti movies seemed to be all Summer and heatwaves mostly, with a hint of thunder.
I'm still stunned how this has gone down so well, and even received an email extolling how brilliant I was, and honestly, I was blushing. But over the moon that a lot of people love it!
Blo?o Outlier Journal
Please send up to THREE haiku.
DEADLINE: Sunday 6th December ALL MIDNIGHT ZONES
Editor, Alan Summers
email: bloooutlierpress@gmail.com
If you search for:
"More than one fold in the paper: Kire, kigo, and the vertical axis of meaning in haiku by Alan Summers"
I'll see if I can get Karen to reply to you, but probably next week now, as she has M.E. and we are super busy with Call of the Page until next Monday, for a day or two! :-)
Delighted to find out that this haiku was selected for re:Virals 283 (February 2021)!
"The Haiku Foundation’s weekly poem commentary feature on some of the finest haiku ever written in English."
November 16th, 2020 at 8:54 am
Alan, I love that image of sliding a kigo into the gun. Wonderful!
November 16th, 2020 at 9:28 am
Wow, thanks Gregory! I continue to be fascinated by kigo, and how we might catch just a little bit in our haiku when we are not Japanese! :-)
warm regards,
Alan
November 16th, 2020 at 9:07 am
Wonderful, so evocative. And the brevity!
November 16th, 2020 at 9:30 am
Thank you Guy!
I didn't know if this would work but I felt it captured how a Japanese haiku writer or renku writer might feel and act. Although we cannot get close to kigo in our non-Japanese haiku and renku, we can at least attempt the flavor, and see that happens!
warm regards,
Alan
November 16th, 2020 at 9:58 am
It does work, Alan. Wonderfully! Thank you for this very creative take on kigo
November 16th, 2020 at 10:17 am
Thanks Jo! :-)
I wasn't sure but your words are helping! :-)
warm regards,
Alan
November 16th, 2020 at 12:12 pm
Brilliant! This one made me ?
marion
November 16th, 2020 at 12:50 pm
Wow, thanks Marion!!!
Now make my day too, and submit some work to Blo?o Outlier Journal before the next wonderful tinywords submission window opens up again! :-)
warm regards,
Alan
November 18th, 2020 at 2:22 am
Shooting with poetry, Alan! ?
I will do my best. I have a few deadlines coming up over the next few weeks, so I’d better put my creative head on!
marion
November 18th, 2020 at 2:42 am
Great! But don't worry if you can't, as writers/poets/artists have daily deadlines and we can't make them all.
I have enough accepted work already for a fantastic first issue, though it'd be lovely to see your name there.
No worries if it doesn't happen, but if you can it's a MAXIMUM of THREE HAIKU, and only a single haiku may be accepted. So no one has more poems in an issue than another person.
Blo?o Outlier Journal
Alan Summers, Editor
email: bloooutlierpress@gmail.com
November 18th, 2020 at 3:51 am
Oh I’d love to make the first issue—hate to miss a party, Alan! :)
November 18th, 2020 at 4:06 am
Fantastic!
Don't overthink, the voice and tone is a mix of upbeat, uplifting, easily accessible haiku for people new to haiku. But it can have an edge too!
Alan
November 16th, 2020 at 1:07 pm
Keep firing, Alan! Great ku.
November 16th, 2020 at 4:13 pm
Thanks Helen!
Over the moon that it's working for a number of people, great comments on Facebook too!
warm regards,
Alan
November 16th, 2020 at 4:31 pm
LOL
November 17th, 2020 at 4:05 am
Wow, LOL aka League of Legends Support. Not sure I'm a legend, but thanks for the thought!
lol ;-)
warm regards,
Alan
November 18th, 2020 at 12:20 am
Hands down the best poem I have read in a while. Breathtaking (pun intended) The image this one conjures for me is a gunmetal sky on the backdrop of a Clint Eastwood movie!
*Shots fired*
November 18th, 2020 at 1:28 am
Thank you Hemapriya!
I love what you said:
"Hands down the best poem I have read in a while. Breathtaking (pun intended)."
thunder
I slide a kigo
into the gun
—ALAN SUMMERS
Yep, I guess so! Thunder (? Kaminari) is a Summer kigo:
"thunder" by itself is a kigo for all Summer, and Eastwood's Spaghetti movies seemed to be all Summer and heatwaves mostly, with a hint of thunder.
I'm still stunned how this has gone down so well, and even received an email extolling how brilliant I was, and honestly, I was blushing. But over the moon that a lot of people love it!
warm regards,
Alan
November 18th, 2020 at 3:57 am
As you know, I am simple. Like it but do not fully understand. Here is my shot:
chrysanthemum
the
slowness
of
dusk
November 18th, 2020 at 4:10 am
Hi Martin,
Well your verse is pretty complex you know!
But I do like it!
You should consider sending to this journal! ;-)
Blo?o Outlier Journal
Please send up to THREE haiku.
DEADLINE: Sunday 6th December ALL MIDNIGHT ZONES
Editor, Alan Summers
email: bloooutlierpress@gmail.com
November 18th, 2020 at 5:24 am
My Area 17 blog article might help?
If you search for:
"More than one fold in the paper: Kire, kigo, and the vertical axis of meaning in haiku by Alan Summers"
I'll see if I can get Karen to reply to you, but probably next week now, as she has M.E. and we are super busy with Call of the Page until next Monday, for a day or two! :-)
warm regards,
Alan
November 18th, 2020 at 8:14 am
Thanks!
November 21st, 2020 at 5:30 am
Thanks for sending your incredible work to my new journal, I love having a haiku by you in there!
Alan
November 24th, 2020 at 9:13 am
Thank You Alansama!
my face turns
sundown
April 3rd, 2021 at 9:48 am
cheers!
November 19th, 2020 at 6:05 am
I love the brilliance of this haiku and the wonderful imagery of loading the gun with a kigo – such inspiration and beauty!
November 19th, 2020 at 7:41 am
Wow, thank you so much, it's deeply appreciated.
I am still stunned that this haiku has connected to so many people.
warmest regards,
Alan
December 7th, 2020 at 11:00 pm
Kigo into the gun.. Wow !! What a brilliant haiku !! Bullseye ! :)
February 1st, 2021 at 1:26 am
Thank you! :-)
Alan
February 28th, 2021 at 8:11 am
Delighted to find out that this haiku was selected for re:Virals 283 (February 2021)!
"The Haiku Foundation’s weekly poem commentary feature on some of the finest haiku ever written in English."
Wow!
March 7th, 2021 at 9:35 am
And now taken for a very prestigious haiku anthology! Wow! Thanks tinywords!
Many thanks for all the comments!
Alan