Beautiful! Such a precise, expansive and lovely evocation of the mysterious connection of natural force and human destiny, of the sacred in the everyday. Thank you!
evocative, a sense of loneliness about this even with the steadfast companionship of the moon–maybe the cold light, both of them wayfarers, no? I keep coming back to this haiku so I suspect there is much more going on than I've so far discovered…it haunts me. Thank you so much.
I love the way the visual imagery shifts as I explore the deliberate ambiguity of the arrangement of the verse. It is like a scene half-seen through moonlight. Beautiful and subtle poetry.
Great to be back with another volume of Tinywords!
Lovely. Who, or what, is leaving? Is it the poet leaving the wayfarers chapel, and so also the moonlight shining through the glass walls of the wayfarers chapel?
Or the moonlight, leaving the chapel; maybe because clouds have covered the moon, or the angle of the moonlight changing as the night progresses?
rich with meaning.
March 22nd, 2016 at 8:34 am
Nice; reminds me of Issa.
March 22nd, 2016 at 10:28 am
Beautiful! Such a precise, expansive and lovely evocation of the mysterious connection of natural force and human destiny, of the sacred in the everyday. Thank you!
March 22nd, 2016 at 5:42 pm
So much thought in just 5 words. A nice contrast of motion in the first line and the steadfastness of moonlight in the last line. Nice work!
Lamart
March 22nd, 2016 at 7:34 pm
evocative, a sense of loneliness about this even with the steadfast companionship of the moon–maybe the cold light, both of them wayfarers, no? I keep coming back to this haiku so I suspect there is much more going on than I've so far discovered…it haunts me. Thank you so much.
March 24th, 2016 at 11:41 pm
Another superb haiku, Roland.
I love the way the visual imagery shifts as I explore the deliberate ambiguity of the arrangement of the verse. It is like a scene half-seen through moonlight. Beautiful and subtle poetry.
Great to be back with another volume of Tinywords!
Best wishes to all poets and the community.
Strider
April 9th, 2016 at 3:40 pm
rapa nui
around the faint silhouette
the night sky
May 26th, 2016 at 8:05 pm
Lovely. Who, or what, is leaving? Is it the poet leaving the wayfarers chapel, and so also the moonlight shining through the glass walls of the wayfarers chapel?
Or the moonlight, leaving the chapel; maybe because clouds have covered the moon, or the angle of the moonlight changing as the night progresses?
rich with meaning.