Neat haiku, I've kept coming back to this, and got to like it better and better.
Charles,
I think it could be in the vein of gendai haiku almost. Although gendai means modern, in Japanese it has other meanings.
Haiku in Japan started to incorporate urban images more and more after its enforced rapid industrialisation in the mid-to-late 1860s.
dead of winter a wraith from the dryer vent drifts through the fence
Frances Jones
I think any urban appliance is fair game for haiku, in Japan, and outside Japan.
This is a very fine haiku and is both contemporary and in keeping with classic and modern haiku in Japan and elsewhere. The haiku is well worth multiple re-readings.
It's the "wraith" FROM the dryer, which could mean a literal wraith, or that warm smell and sensation you get from the laundromat dryers, and which would come from people's clothing, containing an essence of them.
This is excellent! To me what is interesting about haiku is that the reader brings their experience and imagination to the writer’s poem. I enjoyed Frances Jones poem and Alan’s take on it.
January 25th, 2011 at 6:16 pm
Being new to modern haiku, is it ok to use human atributes such a "dryer vent"?
January 25th, 2011 at 10:06 pm
Great image–love it!
January 26th, 2011 at 1:24 am
only January and
all my warmest socks
have holes
January 26th, 2011 at 6:02 pm
Mist ahead
the driving path
stays puzzled
———————–
Ice rain
traffic lights
flicker, in cold
January 26th, 2011 at 6:02 pm
winter bites.good
February 1st, 2011 at 11:12 am
Neat haiku, I've kept coming back to this, and got to like it better and better.
Charles,
I think it could be in the vein of gendai haiku almost. Although gendai means modern, in Japanese it has other meanings.
Haiku in Japan started to incorporate urban images more and more after its enforced rapid industrialisation in the mid-to-late 1860s.
dead of winter
a wraith from the dryer vent
drifts through the fence
Frances Jones
I think any urban appliance is fair game for haiku, in Japan, and outside Japan.
This is a very fine haiku and is both contemporary and in keeping with classic and modern haiku in Japan and elsewhere. The haiku is well worth multiple re-readings.
It's the "wraith" FROM the dryer, which could mean a literal wraith, or that warm smell and sensation you get from the laundromat dryers, and which would come from people's clothing, containing an essence of them.
Great stuff!
Alan, With Words
February 2nd, 2011 at 1:27 pm
This is excellent! To me what is interesting about haiku is that the reader brings their experience and imagination to the writer’s poem. I enjoyed Frances Jones poem and Alan’s take on it.