baseball in the distance
a metronome keeping
the slow time of summer


5 Responses

  1. richard jordan Says:

    very nice, Kaylyssa

  2. haikuapprentice Says:

    Very clever – I like the way you have stretched the first and third lines and shortened the middle one, to give a steady beat of 6 syllables each line. It has the effect of slowing the poem, and capturing in poetic rhythm the summer experience you describe.

  3. Alison Hedlund Says:

    Nice rhythm of words, bat and ball. Brings back Little League memories… :-)

  4. Alan Summers Says:

    Wonderful capture of baseball in haiku, I think both Shiki and Cor van den Heuvel would appreciate this.

    Alan

  5. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    This has really captured a dreamy, hazy moment of summer.

    marion

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