woodsmoke
and autumn leaves . . .
in a dream
I set out on a journey
to find you again

8 Responses

  1. Peez Says:

    like classic Western Wind poem by anon
    the speaker could be eight or eighty

    P

  2. Alan Summers Says:

    Wonderful poem:

    woodsmoke
    and autumn leaves . . .
    in a dream
    I set out on a journey
    to find you again

    —Stewart C. Baker

    I love the first two lines, packed full of atmosphere, with an extra poignant concluding three lines.

    warm regards,

    Alan

  3. snakypoet Says:

    What Alan said. :)

  4. Sheila Sondik Says:

    Beautiful tanka. Thank you.

  5. haikuapprentice Says:

    Excellent tanka, Stewart.
    I also like the hint of ambiguity in the middle line.

    Thanks for sharing

    Strider

  6. Alison Hedlund Says:

    Evocative and full of the mystery and magic of autumn. Dreams often show us what we need to do…

  7. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    Great use of smell in this one, Stewart. Made me think of Halloween, as if the smoke mesmerized the author and made him dream that night!

    marion

  8. Bethany Says:

    Wow. This creates instant atmosphere and intrigue. Thank you for sharing it with us.

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