the radio drones
as I shave
my father’s face


9 Responses

  1. Alan Summers Says:

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    the radio drones
    as I shave
    my fathers face

    —THOM NORGANG

    I don't know if this is an intentional typo, but sometimes they bring forth nuggets.

    Even though I'm adopted, how many fathers have I seen as I've shaved my face over decades?

    And how phases of my father, or his father, or father's father, have I seen through teenage years into adulthood?

    The verb choice, often neglected, adds its own strong take on the subject.

    Highly atmospheric piece of writing.

    warmest regards,

    Alan

  2. Peter Newton Says:

    Hi Alan,

    The word is "father's." I've corrected the typo, with apologies.

    –Peter

  3. imogen288 Says:

    The radio drones
    as I swim in and out of
    the dreams it murmurs.

  4. Alan Summers Says:

    It was an interesting typo though. Sometimes a mistake on our part takes us further than we intended.

    It's a wonderful haiku nonetheless, but its initial typo, now gone, got me thinking of all the fathers I've met, could have been, and the phases they all went through.

    I'm glad I saw the typo before it was corrected. It's got me thinking which is no bad thing for a writer. :-)

    warmest regards,

    Alan

  5. Peter Newton Says:

    Agreed. Inspiration comes in many places. Thanks for your comments Alan. –Peter

  6. janet Says:

    V. thought-provoking. Many possible stories here. One could read it over and over.

  7. Marie Shimane Says:

    in the mirror
    all my mother's expressions
    look back at me

  8. Paul Heinowski Says:

    My father was a proud man. But no-one protests at his weakness now. Not even the radio.

  9. Margery Says:

    Fú, jó lenne magyarul. Nem nagyon beszélek külföldiül, még az oroszt erőltették a nyakamba.. Mindenképpen lesz könyv (és biztos szakácskönyv is) a fa alatt, én választom ki a saját ajándékom :D Az meg milyen jó volt, hogy megvettük a Mit-gédesséuekek, erre kiderült, hogy a Bonbonettis cuccokkal kaptunk :)

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