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9 Responses

1. Shrikaanth K Murthy Says:
   October 19th, 2015 at 8:17 am

   Good one Dave

2. harrisfr Says:
   October 19th, 2015 at 8:25 am

   Thank You!

3. daveserjeant Says:
   October 19th, 2015 at 3:03 pm

   Thank you Shrikaanth.

4. Alan Summers Says:
   October 19th, 2015 at 8:34 am

   Great sense of movement in this haiku:

   cloud shadows on the highway scudding a h e a d

   The spreading out of ahead gives another level.

   warm regards,

   Alan

   cloud mountain
   she screams her daughter's name
   into the month of march

   Alan Summers
   Anthology Credit: Air BHS Anthology (British Haiku Society Members’ Anthology, 2012)
   Brass Bell "Alan Summers Spotlight" July 2015

5. daveserjeant Says:
   October 19th, 2015 at 3:05 pm

   Hi Alan. Thanks for the comments. I think the original had the a and the d spaced even further, so I either submitted the wrong version or the hard spacing didn't work online. No matter.

6. Alan Summers Says:
   October 19th, 2015 at 3:19 pm

   The great thing is that the haiku is strong enough without relying on the concrete poem aspect in the last word.

   It's still cool! :-)

   warm regards,

   Alan

7. Magyar Says:
   October 19th, 2015 at 12:06 pm

   Clouds; streak across this horizon; full sail.

8. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:
   October 19th, 2015 at 4:04 pm

   Very effective!

   marion

9. Lamart Cooper Says:
   October 19th, 2015 at 9:04 pm

   There is a fine sense of balance in this one line haiku. An enjoyable read!

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