cloud shadows on the highway scudding a h e a d
Issue 15.2 | 19 October 2015
Good one Dave
Thank you Shrikaanth.
Great sense of movement in this haiku:
The spreading out of ahead gives another level.
she screams her daughter's name
into the month of march
Anthology Credit: Air BHS Anthology (British Haiku Society Members’ Anthology, 2012)
Brass Bell "Alan Summers Spotlight" July 2015
Hi Alan. Thanks for the comments. I think the original had the a and the d spaced even further, so I either submitted the wrong version or the hard spacing didn't work online. No matter.
The great thing is that the haiku is strong enough without relying on the concrete poem aspect in the last word.
It's still cool! :-)
Clouds; streak across this horizon; full sail.
There is a fine sense of balance in this one line haiku. An enjoyable read!
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