cloud shadows on the highway scudding a h e a d
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David Serjeant
David Serjeant lives in Derbyshire, UK, where he works in online communication for a local authority. His work has been published in journals such as Blithe Spirit, Presence, Simply Haiku, Shamrock and Chrysanthemum, amongst others. View all posts by David Serjeant
Good one Dave
Thank You!
Thank you Shrikaanth.
Great sense of movement in this haiku:
cloud shadows on the highway scudding a h e a d
The spreading out of ahead gives another level.
warm regards,
Alan
cloud mountain
she screams her daughter's name
into the month of march
Alan Summers
Anthology Credit: Air BHS Anthology (British Haiku Society Members’ Anthology, 2012)
Brass Bell "Alan Summers Spotlight" July 2015
Hi Alan. Thanks for the comments. I think the original had the a and the d spaced even further, so I either submitted the wrong version or the hard spacing didn't work online. No matter.
The great thing is that the haiku is strong enough without relying on the concrete poem aspect in the last word.
It's still cool! :-)
warm regards,
Alan
Clouds; streak across this horizon; full sail.
Very effective!
marion
There is a fine sense of balance in this one line haiku. An enjoyable read!