still pond -
I write my name in water
with a dry stick


—M. Sharif
        

A little nod to Basho and Keats and the creative impulse :)

Responses to the haiku for 8 November 2007 by M. Sharif

  1.  
    gK
    2007-08-23 17:25:03
     

    For awhile I was thinking that this was a deja-ku. Then I realized that it was part of a group of haiku that was recently posted to haikutalk mailing list by someone who I think is probably a fairly new haiku poet. If I remember correctly, this was the best of the bunch. I really like it.

  2.  
    Alan Summers
    2007-08-26 11:22:58
     

    You're right. I too liked it. I was trying to find Sheila's comments on the earlier toast haiku, which gave better versions.

    This one I like as is! ;-)

  3.  
    b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)
    2007-11-08 03:44:50
     

    creative, munzar, though i felt something escaping while reading "with a dry stick".

    -

    still waters
    my name flows from the stick
    to what depths

  4.  
    2007-11-08 16:19:19
     

    Wow! Great, and the dry stick open meanings and meanings.

  5.  
    judith ingram
    2007-11-09 11:25:56
     

    good haiku, munzar

    still water
    I reach down and touch
    a cloud

  6.  
    Vasile Moldovan (vasilemoldovan at yahoo dot com)
    2007-11-10 08:25:17
     

    Writing haiku...
    on the pond mirror
    a goose feather

  7.  
    2007-12-28 08:52:22
     

    I like the "dry stick" in the water, contrasting dry and wet, making me think of where the stick was found.

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