tinywords: haiku for 8 November 2007 by M. Sharif

still pond -
I write my name in water
with a dry stick


—M. Sharif

A little nod to Basho and Keats and the creative impulse :)

published 8 November 2007
in haiku

Responses to the haiku for 8 November 2007 by M. Sharif

gK

2007-08-23 17:25:03

For awhile I was thinking that this was a deja-ku. Then I realized that it was part of a group of haiku that was recently posted to haikutalk mailing list by someone who I think is probably a fairly new haiku poet. If I remember correctly, this was the best of the bunch. I really like it.
Alan Summers

2007-08-26 11:22:58

You're right. I too liked it. I was trying to find Sheila's comments on the earlier toast haiku, which gave better versions.

This one I like as is! ;-)
b. m. richardson (orgbob at webtv dot net)

2007-11-08 03:44:50

creative, munzar, though i felt something escaping while reading "with a dry stick".

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still waters
my name flows from the stick
to what depths
Dirk van Nouhuys

2007-11-08 16:19:19

Wow! Great, and the dry stick open meanings and meanings.
judith ingram

2007-11-09 11:25:56

good haiku, munzar

still water
I reach down and touch
a cloud
Vasile Moldovan (vasilemoldovan at yahoo dot com)

2007-11-10 08:25:17

Writing haiku...
on the pond mirror
a goose feather
Susan Friesen

2007-12-28 08:52:22

I like the "dry stick" in the water, contrasting dry and wet, making me think of where the stick was found.