Ray Rasmussen's haiku, haiga and haibun and articles have appeared regularly in the haiku genre journals. He's the managing editor of contemporary haibun online. He dreamed that in a previous life he was a university professor, but now spends his time feeding the dogs, doing housework, writing and doing photography.
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seemingly, almost, as verbose as i am…
as for the haiku, allow me to contemplate on the long of it.
pebble, hmmm, long shadow???
as some might say, “this is so cute”
i would love to think this to be a metaphor, while thinking we had a boulder here.
well, more on this later.
possibly, my allowing it to seep in, will enhance me.
I really like this – both the long and the short of it. What a lovely concept…”to walk in the beauty of small places.” The haiku is profound. P.S. Only almost Bob, only almost.
kathy, by now, are we on a first name basis, i comprehended what ray was sharing.
though, seemingly, a better choice of words would have allow the piece to not be self contradicting.
some things exist, only, within the frameworks of one’s mind.
kathy, i wonder, was that a short walk, or did ray say, “walk in the beauty of”…
i must admit, i enjoyed the piece, however, you can only imagine how my mind plays tricks on me.
kathy, if you ask me, i’ll tell you what i mean.
i’ll give you a hint, with my infamous “case in point”, with a slight remake.
kathy, by now, are we on a first name basis, i comprehended what ray was sharing.
though, seemingly, a better choice of words would have allow the piece to not be self contradicting.
some things exist, only, within the frameworks of one’s mind.
kathy, i wonder, was that a short walk, or did ray say, “walk in the beauty of”…
i must admit, i enjoyed the piece, however, you can only imagine how my mind plays tricks on me.
kathy, if you ask me, i’ll tell you what i mean.
i’ll give you a hint, with my infamous “case in point”, with a slight remake.
Pity about the ? in the emailed version(1st line).
Love the haibun, how perceptive. I have been going to a similar area for 15 years and I find delights in the small things constantly ( and I must look much the same as you). Tourists see so little really but that’s time I guess. I like to find them and open their eyes, even briefly.
and i’ll try to be brief, thoughts on the “rules” on the haibun… leaves one’s head swimming… kaleidoscope.
in analyzing ray’s work, though, he seemingly is established, the thought continually drawing my attention, things seemingly so innocent, find their way into being complex. funny, not the “haha” variety, but the “hmmm” variety, psychoanalyze, becomes vocal.
on ray’s work, i, too, felt in his words, rather being than detached and objective, he forgot to let go.
haiku at the end, was it really a haiku? prose and haiku, jury still out.
“interesting story”, indeed.
brevity, where; abbreviated, where. beginning, middle, and ending, feasible. juxtapose, while being light hearted, conceivable.
Good critical comments … thanks all. I hadn’t meant to set myself up as ‘expert’ on either the haiku or haibun form. But I do enjoy the writing and the exchange.
Cheers,
Ray Rasmussen
ray, a very good comment, as socrates “insinuated”, “self-knowledge, is a proper beginning”, but the wordage i apply to myself, “know thyself” is realize the extent of thine own ignorance”; however, this is haiku, perhaps more on the worthiness of man, his destiny and nature at a later time.
Ah! Ray. I was delighted to find your haiku here. It subtly shows how small things, at the end of the day, when we reflect, are more important than we originally thought. Wonderful haibun. Thanks for the pleasure. kirsty
seemingly, almost, as verbose as i am…
as for the haiku, allow me to contemplate on the long of it.
pebble, hmmm, long shadow???
as some might say, “this is so cute”
i would love to think this to be a metaphor, while thinking we had a boulder here.
well, more on this later.
possibly, my allowing it to seep in, will enhance me.
I really like this – both the long and the short of it. What a lovely concept…”to walk in the beauty of small places.” The haiku is profound. P.S. Only almost Bob, only almost.
The haiku is good. Last week I wrote something similar about cows’ shadows, but pebbles are surely better.
The haibun I’m not so sure about. There seems to be an extraordinary volume of introspection, as well as a weight of adverbs, for any kind of haikai.
“Probably not knowing what to else to say and having lost interest in my destination, he adds…”
A serious case of telling not showing. Haibun?
kathy, by now, are we on a first name basis, i comprehended what ray was sharing.
though, seemingly, a better choice of words would have allow the piece to not be self contradicting.
some things exist, only, within the frameworks of one’s mind.
kathy, i wonder, was that a short walk, or did ray say, “walk in the beauty of”…
i must admit, i enjoyed the piece, however, you can only imagine how my mind plays tricks on me.
kathy, if you ask me, i’ll tell you what i mean.
i’ll give you a hint, with my infamous “case in point”, with a slight remake.
even the pebbles
cast long shadows
at day’s end –
kathy, by now, are we on a first name basis, i comprehended what ray was sharing.
though, seemingly, a better choice of words would have allow the piece to not be self contradicting.
some things exist, only, within the frameworks of one’s mind.
kathy, i wonder, was that a short walk, or did ray say, “walk in the beauty of”…
i must admit, i enjoyed the piece, however, you can only imagine how my mind plays tricks on me.
kathy, if you ask me, i’ll tell you what i mean.
i’ll give you a hint, with my infamous “case in point”, with a slight remake.
even the pebbles
cast long shadows
at day’s end –
Pity about the ? in the emailed version(1st line).
Love the haibun, how perceptive. I have been going to a similar area for 15 years and I find delights in the small things constantly ( and I must look much the same as you). Tourists see so little really but that’s time I guess. I like to find them and open their eyes, even briefly.
i “think” i am in agreement with you, norman.
“haibun”
and i’ll try to be brief, thoughts on the “rules” on the haibun… leaves one’s head swimming… kaleidoscope.
in analyzing ray’s work, though, he seemingly is established, the thought continually drawing my attention, things seemingly so innocent, find their way into being complex. funny, not the “haha” variety, but the “hmmm” variety, psychoanalyze, becomes vocal.
on ray’s work, i, too, felt in his words, rather being than detached and objective, he forgot to let go.
haiku at the end, was it really a haiku? prose and haiku, jury still out.
“interesting story”, indeed.
brevity, where; abbreviated, where. beginning, middle, and ending, feasible. juxtapose, while being light hearted, conceivable.
yes, the list does get long.
Good critical comments … thanks all. I hadn’t meant to set myself up as ‘expert’ on either the haiku or haibun form. But I do enjoy the writing and the exchange.
Cheers,
Ray Rasmussen
ray, a very good comment, as socrates “insinuated”, “self-knowledge, is a proper beginning”, but the wordage i apply to myself, “know thyself” is realize the extent of thine own ignorance”; however, this is haiku, perhaps more on the worthiness of man, his destiny and nature at a later time.
ah yes, “the things we hadn’t meant…”
Ah! Ray. I was delighted to find your haiku here. It subtly shows how small things, at the end of the day, when we reflect, are more important than we originally thought. Wonderful haibun. Thanks for the pleasure. kirsty
touring forbidden palace
the corridors that hide
secret murders and tales
day’s end —
even my mind
is set upon, by long shadows
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