inter-city train journey –
a rattling window top
shuts itself

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Alan Summers

Alan's haiku and poetry is published in over 60 anthologies, and a number of languages. He regularly reads, performs, and workshops from venues as diverse as possible including shop windows; inner city rainforests; cliff tops; to the more orthodox places...on occasion. His website is: http://www.withwords.org.uk Contact: alan at withwords dot org dot uk

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  1. This haiku brought immediate memories of the ride on the Circumvisuviano inner-city ‘train’ that runs between Naples and Sorrento. We have knicknammed it the bone-rattler. You must have ridden it to come up with these words.

  2. Thanks for this powerful Haiku Alan.

    crowded train~
    through the maze of faces
    a distant smile~

    train rattles on~
    stink from the toilet
    people drink coffee~

    train corridor~
    ugly old beggar
    covers his face
    with a dirty cloth~

  3. bonsai tree
    on the cliff
    overlooking the clouds

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    inter-city train journey –
    a rattling window top
    shuts itself

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    Dear Bob,

    Thank you for your bedroom window haiku which, alongside all the above train haiku, reminded me of my sleeper train haiku, so here it is!

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    the night train passes
    along the mountain trail
    garlic snores

    Alan Summers

    le train de nuit passe
    sur une voie de montagne
    ronflements d’ail

    (French trans. Serge Tome – Temps Libre)

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    another rain day
    I travel on foot
    to the train station

    Alan Summers

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  5. Dear Prado Chekov,

    A very moving haiku. It’s open enough so I get my own response from it, and reminds me of my haiku that I wrote after my Father’s funeral.

    the rain
    almost a friend
    this funeral

    Alan Summers

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