inter-city train journey –
a rattling window top
shuts itself

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Alan Summers

Alan's haiku and poetry is published in over 60 anthologies, and a number of languages. He regularly reads, performs, and workshops from venues as diverse as possible including shop windows; inner city rainforests; cliff tops; to the more orthodox places...on occasion. His website is: http://www.withwords.org.uk Contact: alan at withwords dot org dot uk

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  1. This haiku brought immediate memories of the ride on the Circumvisuviano inner-city ‘train’ that runs between Naples and Sorrento. We have knicknammed it the bone-rattler. You must have ridden it to come up with these words.

  2. Thanks for this powerful Haiku Alan.

    crowded train~
    through the maze of faces
    a distant smile~

    train rattles on~
    stink from the toilet
    people drink coffee~

    train corridor~
    ugly old beggar
    covers his face
    with a dirty cloth~

  3. bonsai tree
    on the cliff
    overlooking the clouds

    inter-city train journey –
    a rattling window top
    shuts itself

  4. Dear Bob,

    Thank you for your bedroom window haiku which, alongside all the above train haiku, reminded me of my sleeper train haiku, so here it is!


    the night train passes
    along the mountain trail
    garlic snores

    Alan Summers

    le train de nuit passe
    sur une voie de montagne
    ronflements d’ail

    (French trans. Serge Tome – Temps Libre)


    another rain day
    I travel on foot
    to the train station

    Alan Summers

  5. Dear Prado Chekov,

    A very moving haiku. It’s open enough so I get my own response from it, and reminds me of my haiku that I wrote after my Father’s funeral.

    the rain
    almost a friend
    this funeral

    Alan Summers

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