summer fountain —
a little boy asks
for his coin back
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Linda Galloway
Linda Galloway is a member of the Southern California Haiku Study Group. She grew up with the many seasons of VT and NH. She been living temporarily in California for the past 30 years with her husband and cats.
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linda, there are times i focus more on the “about the author”; in yours, there was my imagination at play. having grown up in the north(pennsylvania), and of late(20 years), living in south florida, i can relate.
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summer carnival-
rain of silver
beneath the “kamikaze”
Linda . . . I read your poem at three in the morning, laughed out loud. I suspect that this young man grew up to be a great entrepreneur. Lovely. Judith Ingram
copper pennies
at the bottom of the pool
I wish, I wish.
Beautiful haiku. I first thought that the boy is a bit naive, but after he understood that the wish he asked for did not come true, he has the right to asked for his coin back. Laugh.
Terrific poem in 13 syllables. The implications for that age of wonder and understanding, what Freud called “the latent stage”–are manifold. Gets one a-thinkin’. Go, Peter Pan!
a nice ku!
Was he lucky? ;-)
I enjoyed the lightness of humour, and in this heat in Blighty in the high 30s celsius, the water in your haiku was very much appreciated too!
summer fountain —
a sweating boy climbs in
to gather coins
Delightful! Thanks.
linda, there are times i focus more on the “about the author”; in yours, there was my imagination at play. having grown up in the north(pennsylvania), and of late(20 years), living in south florida, i can relate.
–
summer carnival-
rain of silver
beneath the “kamikaze”
Linda . . . I read your poem at three in the morning, laughed out loud. I suspect that this young man grew up to be a great entrepreneur. Lovely. Judith Ingram
copper pennies
at the bottom of the pool
I wish, I wish.
Beautiful haiku. I first thought that the boy is a bit naive, but after he understood that the wish he asked for did not come true, he has the right to asked for his coin back. Laugh.
Terrific poem in 13 syllables. The implications for that age of wonder and understanding, what Freud called “the latent stage”–are manifold. Gets one a-thinkin’. Go, Peter Pan!
A robin’s offering
water ripples
coins sparkle
I really liked this haiku. It was very simple, but left ripples as any good haiku should! ;-)
I enjoy this on several levels & keep coming back to it. Thanks!
Wonderful haiku as you so often do.
cotton candy–
around his mouth
sticky red