the boy’s thumb
in his mouth–
the carpenters grin
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Tim Jamieson
I am Canadian, born and raised in the province of Saskatchewan and living in Winnipeg, Manitoba. I first began writing haiku in 1983, and have had work accepted in Canada, the U.S., Japan, Australia, New Zealand, England, Ireland and Belgium.
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For me, this reveals itself slowly and all the more effectively for that. So much here about boys and men.
_So true Bill, and the -smile- broadcasts the memory.
_Tim, I’m smiling!
_M
I like this partly because we don’t have enough sensation haiku, they are predominently visual, and that a carpenter is mentioned! ;-)
Dee Evetts being the famous carpenter haiku writer so far of course, but that might change! ;-)
alan, a question, isn’t the haiku visual in nature.
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bill, your words hammer truth; boys imitate men, while the boy lives on in the man.
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nail and crusted hammer
midst the saw dust
on the floor…
teary-eyed boy
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magyar, smiles grace the faces of those not having held the hammer, if only for a moment.
then, a cringe
–
silence-
the throbbing black & blue thumb
The boy’s thumb,the implied hammer, the grown-up’s grin – represent a sensual haiku.Well written. Enjoyed.
Well, well, the thumb is crushed, I understand. The boy isn’t weaned from his ache.