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  1. Simplicity says it best. A fine haiku with an emotive resonance beyond its surface imagery. Good work, Rita.

  2. So much is conveyed by the word “only”. Just try removing it and you’ll see what I mean! I’m so glad you included it — a wise choice.

  3. Mrs Rita, your poem is a wonderful haiku about the universal peace.A common subject for three great religions.At least…

    making peace with…
    a woman and a sparrow
    share the fast meal

  4. Hello, Rita!
    Astahsin haikuki jiddan. It paints a very spare but effective image. Thank you (and thanks, Dylan) for posting it here.
    Salaam, shalom, peace.

  5. I still do not feel that “only” works
    within this example.

    Now you have to think about what “only”
    means, and there is more going on here,
    than; only.

    gene

  6. (only)
    neither more nor less; simply; excepting; in the end; certainly; then back to solitarily.
    gene, “only” provides a wealth of richness to rita’s haiku, one to read daily with coffee.

    the cause of this (solitude), as your words suggest, gene, who knows; conceivably winter. unknowingly, the sparrow is fated to share more than a meal.

    wintry morn
    only
    a sparrow sings

  7. The simplicity is so stricking and powerful.
    “A sparrow” is such a rich symbol.
    For me the use of “only” tells me a lot about the possible subtext/s of this poem.
    Every time I read it I see something else. A sign of a good haiku!

  8. Hi Rita.

    As I thought Ur lines are missing beats of ur heart.it says to tread into that up to the bottom.but bottemless feelings

  9. One can feel profoundly the exclusivity of your use of the language. I think that excellent poets exhibit uniqueness and engage the reader with the words spontaniously…In other words;You are an excellent poetess and I am very proud of you.Maha.

  10. Dear all,
    thank you for taking the time to comment.
    I owe my humble delight to this wonderful site.

    Best, Rita.

  11. rita –
    i really like what the picture presents… maybe the “only” suggests a little more self-pity than you might want?

    a sparrow
    to share my meal –
    winter solitude

    maybe even forget the “solitude”…

    anyway, very nice… thank you –

    -brett

  12. dear rita

    just discovered you and your fine poems by following links on riverbend’s blog. happy to find you.

    here’s an old haiku of mine from a long walk i once took in new mexico–

    a little sparrow
    takes a puddle bath . . .
    wish i could join him

    peace, tenzing

    dhdutton@yahoo.com

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