I reside in Portland Oregon and have been writing haiku for over 10 years. I am inspired by the nonstop rain here and the roar of the ocean just a short drive away.
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Been there, done that. Thanks for the memory (I think).
Nicely observed and gently funny. “upon” is the right choice to my ear.
Just a quick response to the note here from Patricia, I actually considered the word ‘on’ when I first wrote this haiku but I felt that it didn’t fit well with the overall rhythm of this piece. But, of course each person can judge according to their own ear :) -Thanks, Felica
There was a hiccup in the posting. That first (and lone) “comment” from me was not meant as a response now (it was from the earlier acceptance process). Blush. I reported the mix-up when I tried to leave a rave comment on this wonderful haiku. Anyway, with or without “on” it’s delightful. Makes this 63 year old feel young just to read it!
once (upon) a time, as many myths and fairy tales begin. it comes (upon) a midnight clear. yes, that monumental first kiss. noses crashing into each other, or finding an eye; yet lips missing.
the kiss for all ages, even having so many prior. then comes that first kiss, all over again.
funny, i never recall the nervousness, more the enjoyment
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Been there, done that. Thanks for the memory (I think).
Nicely observed and gently funny. “upon” is the right choice to my ear.
“Upon” sounds better to me too. And I apoligize in advance for the following.
upon
a pond, basho’s frog
up on his hokku
Funny and sweet. Nice image.
~Megan
leaning against
the historical marker–
first kiss
Just a quick response to the note here from Patricia, I actually considered the word ‘on’ when I first wrote this haiku but I felt that it didn’t fit well with the overall rhythm of this piece. But, of course each person can judge according to their own ear :) -Thanks, Felica
A very nice one!
What an embarrassing moment!
First kiss
punctuated with
a burp
There was a hiccup in the posting. That first (and lone) “comment” from me was not meant as a response now (it was from the earlier acceptance process). Blush. I reported the mix-up when I tried to leave a rave comment on this wonderful haiku. Anyway, with or without “on” it’s delightful. Makes this 63 year old feel young just to read it!
First kisses can happen at any age and it doesn’t necessarily get easier as we get older.
First kiss
eyes screwed shut
in fear and desire
once (upon) a time, as many myths and fairy tales begin. it comes (upon) a midnight clear. yes, that monumental first kiss. noses crashing into each other, or finding an eye; yet lips missing.
the kiss for all ages, even having so many prior. then comes that first kiss, all over again.
funny, i never recall the nervousness, more the enjoyment
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first kiss–
the full moon never brighter
I second Patricia’s comments. We both love the haiku, and who can deny a first kiss after all! ;-)
!~sweet~! …i remain smiling.