snow blowing sideways crows in flight
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Jim Tantillo
Jim is a college instructor and historic preservationist. He has contributed to several online haiku blogs, including http://huntinghaikudaily.blogspot.com . He lives with his wife and two daughters near Ithaca, NY. Contact: jat4 at cornell dot edu View all posts by Jim Tantillo
It looks pretty good as a one-liner, I really like it!
‘cold cold’ isn’t necessary as ‘snow blowing sideways’ says it all!
snow blowing sideways crows in flight
As a one liner I would have no trouble voting yes, it’s very dramatic/atmospheric without being overstated.
Alan, that’s a great suggestion. I’m going to see if the author likes it.
Great! Thanks Dylan.
It’s really nice when a haiku is almost there, the writer has made a good effort at editing, and tinywords can offer just a tweak and it gets published, go Tinywords go! ;-)