midday moon against the fence yellow grass
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John Stone
I am a working musician living in Northern California. Can somebody spot me a twenty until next week? Some of my work can be found in Simply Haiku, Contemporary Haibun, and Turquoise Dawn. Contact: Stonetalker at musician dot org View all posts by John Stone
I disagree with your premise. The greatest challenge is excellence, as difficult to achieve in three lines as in one. But it’s a challenge you’ve met. Good work.
Thank you very much, Bill…
fading sunlight mirrors blues bar
Johnny,
Here’s a case where a haiku with three images works well for me. Three strong images, to be sure, but they compliment rather than overpower each other.
I think I’d prefer this poem in 3 lines for the pivot:
midday moon
against the fence
yellow grass
Nice one, amigo!
moon against fence a dimpled ass
open window speeding moon shot
The more I read this one, the more I like it. Good haiku!
I, too, think this lovely haiku would be well served in three lines. Perhaps, that is being arbitrary. Much of life is.
Full moon,
a golden trellis up
from the sea.
well done as either a three line or a one-
line haiku John.
I’m enjoying the layers in this one! ;-)
scooter, you’re too funny :-)))
now, i struggle to recompose my thoughts.
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john, great visual, i’ll try again later.