Such a moving haiku that links the human experience with the cold season and the end of the year. But the mention of 'sky' at the close somehow shifts the emotional tone, from a closing down (the loss of memory) to an expansion (endless space, infinity), and that is comforting.
Yes, I think lynnerees…I think the look to the sky does bring that expansion… and also for me, it connects with the “struggle” …in that often one looks at the sky wishing to name the stars, identify them, and it is not always easy… and yet we love the sight so much… those clear beautiful stars… that touch our hearts like our children…
Yes, I think lynnerees…I think the look to the sky does bring that expansion… and also for me, it connects with the “struggle” …in that often one looks at the sky wishing to name the stars, identify them, and it is not always easy… and yet we love the sight so much… those clear beautiful stars… that touch our hearts like our children…
December 17th, 2009 at 11:10 am
Not a classic 5-7-5 haiku, but beautiful and evocative of both season and state – well done! :)
December 17th, 2009 at 11:29 am
very poignant. thank you.
December 17th, 2009 at 2:28 pm
g'day
this is excellent! So very real.
Peace and Love
December 17th, 2009 at 5:38 pm
It is poignant …like a cloudy dreary December sky
December 17th, 2009 at 8:03 pm
Very touching. Thanks.
December 18th, 2009 at 4:06 am
Such a moving haiku that links the human experience with the cold season and the end of the year. But the mention of 'sky' at the close somehow shifts the emotional tone, from a closing down (the loss of memory) to an expansion (endless space, infinity), and that is comforting.
December 19th, 2009 at 7:35 am
Yes, I think lynnerees…I think the look to the sky does bring that expansion… and also for me, it connects with the “struggle” …in that often one looks at the sky wishing to name the stars, identify them, and it is not always easy… and yet we love the sight so much… those clear beautiful stars… that touch our hearts like our children…
December 19th, 2009 at 3:35 pm
Yes, I think lynnerees…I think the look to the sky does bring that expansion… and also for me, it connects with the “struggle” …in that often one looks at the sky wishing to name the stars, identify them, and it is not always easy… and yet we love the sight so much… those clear beautiful stars… that touch our hearts like our children…