a spot of light
from the hand mirror
travels up and down her arm

shadow patterns
her neck

5 Responses

  1. syllable?17 Says:

    Yes, nice senryu, if the last two lines are ignored as redundent and distracting.

    I can, also, imagine a car mirror. A different spin. Perhaps stopped at traffic lights, as the effect takes place, an urban night, with neon and rain.

  2. John Says:

    gorgeous. last lines are good for me.

  3. Rhoda Galgiani Says:

    I agree, the last two lines are distracting. Other than that great poetry!

  4. Bernie Goldhirsch Says:

    Not as distracting as ”

  5. China King Box Says:

    Cool post.

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