a spot of light
from the hand mirror
travels up and down her arm
shadow patterns
her neck
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Harold Bowes
Harold Bowes' poems have appeared in various publications. Ravenna Press published his book If Nothing Else in 2004. Harold edits Alba, an ezine dedicated to short poems.
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Yes, nice senryu, if the last two lines are ignored as redundent and distracting.
I can, also, imagine a car mirror. A different spin. Perhaps stopped at traffic lights, as the effect takes place, an urban night, with neon and rain.
Yes, nice senryu, if the last two lines are ignored as redundent and distracting.
I can, also, imagine a car mirror. A different spin. Perhaps stopped at traffic lights, as the effect takes place, an urban night, with neon and rain.
gorgeous. last lines are good for me.
I agree, the last two lines are distracting. Other than that great poetry!
Not as distracting as ”
redundent.”
Cool post.