old pond—
a crab sneaking into
the sunken sneaker

11 Responses

  1. Frances Ruth Harris Says:

    This resting crab makes a nice image.
    Thank you for posting this one~!

  2. Merrill Gonzales Says:

    Very nice… :-)

  3. d. f. tweney Says:

    on the remains
    of the oil

  4. Yuji Says:

    Coral slowly forms
    on the ruined platform now.
    May they rest in peace.

  5. Dirk van Nouhuys Says:

    Good. Dark, evocative of the ancient underwater quality of life and passing.

  6. Barbara A Taylor Says:

    great image…

    peace and love

  7. Alison Says:

    Evocative image…but I wonder if there are crabs in old ponds. I can envision crayfish…

  8. Alison Says:

    Perhaps it could be a brackish pond?

  9. Helga Härle Says:

    Hm Alison,

    you're actually right – it was a crayfish!

    I guess it was something with the rhytm that made me write "crab", which I actually did from the beginning. So I think I'll stick to it as it is and yes, why not a brackish pond?

  10. Alison Says:

    I only know about the crabs' environment because my son fishes for them off the docks here (Strait of Juan de Fuca). He has caught crayfish in freshwater lakes, too. I personally prefer "crayfish," and think the rhythm works fine, but of course it is your poem. It is a delightful image.

  11. martin1223 Says:

    It is lovely! However, I just thought of a noirish variation:

    old wreck—
    a crab half out of the sunken sneaker

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