Also good, and with the beginning of "gusty wind" the reader gets a visceral feeling before the next lines. I found myself in the natural world first, and then how inanimate objects reacted.
I was sat in my front room alone, wind howling down the chimney and against my large patio doors when I opened this. We live on the sea front in a popular tourist sopt, so an an amazing amount of paper cups and take out food wrappers are airborne on days like this. Great poem.
I like these simple three line vignettes. Small still life movies. Some might mutter about 'endless substitution' – but plastic cups does it fine by me. The wabisabi of windblown litter. 'Gusty wind' is the appropriate opening shot for this delightful moment, which we can all easily relate to. Whether inanimate objects 'chase each other' is a mute point.
September 9th, 2010 at 12:06 pm
Like it! Can almost feel that wind trying to blow me away!
September 9th, 2010 at 5:08 pm
This is nice but it makes me wonder. What if you change it around?
three plastic cups
chasing one another
gusty wind
September 9th, 2010 at 10:51 pm
three plastic cups
chasing one another
two wind blown squirrels
September 12th, 2010 at 7:55 am
Also good, and with the beginning of "gusty wind" the reader gets a visceral feeling before the next lines. I found myself in the natural world first, and then how inanimate objects reacted.
September 10th, 2010 at 1:59 am
I was sat in my front room alone, wind howling down the chimney and against my large patio doors when I opened this. We live on the sea front in a popular tourist sopt, so an an amazing amount of paper cups and take out food wrappers are airborne on days like this. Great poem.
September 10th, 2010 at 2:19 am
I like these simple three line vignettes. Small still life movies. Some might mutter about 'endless substitution' – but plastic cups does it fine by me. The wabisabi of windblown litter. 'Gusty wind' is the appropriate opening shot for this delightful moment, which we can all easily relate to. Whether inanimate objects 'chase each other' is a mute point.
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September 11th, 2010 at 11:31 am
Thanks to all for the kind words and your takes on the theme!
September 17th, 2010 at 7:37 am
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