dead birds at the base
of the lit skyscraper
autumn midnight
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George Swede
George Swede has published 32 collections of poetry, two of them in May 2010 by Inkling Press: Joy In Me Still (haiku) and White Thoughts. Blue Mind (tanka). To find out more about these new books, go to georgeswede.com. For more extensive information about this poet and his work, see his extensive web site or go to Wikipedia.
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I don't know why but it reminds me of my friend Yu Yan Chen when she witnessed 911 and lost a friend to that attack.
Setting that aside, I really like the musicality of this haiku, and the fact it isn't a minimalist haiku or a format fragment and phrase/phrase and fragment haiku.
Looking forward to seeing more of your work on tinywords! ;-)
I too like that it is not minimalist, and I like the image and the evocations of the image, but 'lit' bothers me. It seems to scan to abruptly, like a caesura. How about 'bright', which would in addition raise the anti in terms of irony.
I don't know why but it reminds me of my friend Yu Yan Chen when she witnessed 911 and lost a friend to that attack.
Setting that aside, I really like the musicality of this haiku, and the fact it isn't a minimalist haiku or a format fragment and phrase/phrase and fragment haiku.
Looking forward to seeing more of your work on tinywords! ;-)
Alan, With Words
I too like that it is not minimalist, and I like the image and the evocations of the image, but 'lit' bothers me. It seems to scan to abruptly, like a caesura. How about 'bright', which would in addition raise the anti in terms of irony.
circling
in the columns of light
a flock of birds
car top guano
canadian geese cross the Hudson
http://www.springerlink.com/content/0ww007252k023…
Martin, I think it's fair to warn people that the link you posted is to a PDF of an epidemiology research paper!
Your'e right and thank you!
hurrying home from the Nutcracker
hoping the mice in the walls
have magically disappeared