the crawl
of the pool vacuum
dog days

11 Responses

  1. Ross Says:

    Love it.

  2. Dawn Apanius Says:

    Nice one.

    skirts the parking lot
    low tide

  3. haikuapprentice Says:

    Gorgeous birds!

    flirting with the waves seagulls


  4. Dawn Apanius Says:

    I love your haiku, Strider. I love seeing seagulls around here. They remind me of the beach.

  5. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    An atmosphere of intense drudgery is well depicted in this.


  6. seaviewwarrenpoint Says:

    I'm going to reply to myself here as I may have completely misinterpreted this poem, Brandon! Being from the cold wet climes of Northern Ireland, we don't have outdoor pools, so when I read this I imagined a garden pool in Florida where it is so hot that even the machine that cleans the pool can just about crawl along! I associated 'dog days' with lethargy and lack of energy due to extreme heat. In fact, the opening scenes of the Ben Kingsley / Ray Winston film 'Sexy Beast' came to mind as soon as I read this.

    That's all! :)

  7. haikuapprentice Says:

    Brandon, I really enjoy this – especially since we in the southern hemisphere are moving into spring and summer and I can look forward to warm days and swimming pools!

    The mention of the "pool vacuum" is particularly vivid for me, since my own family never had a pool, and it was only when we came to the city every summer and stayed with my aunt and uncle and cousins, we enjoyed the use of their pool. I was always positively captivated by the trilobite-like vacuum cleaner that slowly chugged continually across the pool floor.

    "dog days" isn't a common term used in Australia, though I am familiar with the expression. Apparently it relates to the ancient Roman belief that the hot weather in late summer is associated with the brightest star in the summer sky – Sirius – the "dog star".
    But there is another connotation of "dog" that is used in Australia and which still fits perfectly with this poem: "dog paddle" – a basic swimming technique which many children appear to naturally discover when they are first starting to swim. It balances therefore the first line: 'the crawl" which invokes for me another swimming stroke – the "Australian crawl" now known as "freestyle".

    So for me, the poem is all about summer at the poolside, remembering summers past, while watching the children play.

    Thank you for conjuring it.


  8. Alan Summers Says:

    the crawl
    of the pool vacuum
    dog days

    —Brandon Bordelon

    Great first two lines, packed with atmosphere.

    The phrase dog days refers to the sultry days of summer, or about an Anime alternative world.

    Could be part of an opening sentence of a novel or short story.

    Alan, With Words

  9. Peter Newton Says:

    Dog Days
    an end of summer sale
    at the Petco

  10. Steave Hussey Says:

    This is really awesome. thanks to share it here.

  11. Chaff Cutter Says:

    I really like dog but i don't know this info about dog thank your sharing this great info.

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