the thin cold metal
next to his heart

7 Responses

  1. Richard Hartwell Says:

    Very poignant. For my friends who didn't make it, thank you.

  2. Peter Newton Says:

    Having just spent the weekend with my 84-year-old veteran father, I continue
    to rethink the meaning of Memorial Day. Your poem's "thin cold metal" helped me do so–what a tangible way of feeling war, that simple cold memento ever-present and in such close contact / conflict with the human heart.
    Made me think: once a soldier, always a soldier. Even a peaceful soldier.

  3. gregory longenecker Says:

    I really love this. It captures my own experience as an army medic. Thank you.

  4. Ariane Says:

    This brought back some memories of my Ex husband who is still in the army… Thanks for the poem.

  5. Dawn Bruce Says:

    I find this so moving.All the sorry of war seems to be there in so few words which makes it even more powerful.

  6. Sheila Sondik Says:

    An eloquent haiku for Memorial Day. So spare and moving.

  7. haikuapprentice Says:

    I am hesitant to comment on haiku with a military subject – or at least such poems that one sees published on Tinywords. To my mind such works, like the heroism of the ordinary men and women who place their lives on the line in times of war, should be received with reverence and gratitude – almost with a bowed head. Which puts me in mind of the slight, unconscious bow of the head when a soldier puts on their dog tags.

    Margaret Chula, thank you for sharing your profound memorial day poem.

    dog-tags –
    all that remains of his
    armour and shield


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