weeping plums –
another fight
about nothing
(previously appeared in the May 2014 issue of? a fine line, the magazine of the New Zealand Poetry Society)
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weeping plums –
another fight
about nothing
(previously appeared in the May 2014 issue of? a fine line, the magazine of the New Zealand Poetry Society)
This is lovely. The first line such an appropriate image for those hopeless arguments.
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weeping plums –
another fight
about nothing
—NORAH JOHNSON
Well, what can I say? ;) This is a Norah Johnson haiku, even before I start to comment. ;)
The concluding 'phrase' ramps up the first line, and vice versa. There's more than just poignancy, sadness, time lost and wasted, there is a chill in the poem to start the hairs on the back of our neck to start to rise.
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street attack –
I hold the young girl
through her convulsions
Alan Summers
Publications credits: World Haiku Review vol. 2: Issue 3 (2002); Short Stuff vol 2, Issue 1, (2003)
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Alan, thanks so much for your great comments :-) Love 'ramps up' – it captures the inexorable escalation of a bad argument.
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street attack –
I hold the young girl
through her convulsions
Alan Summers
And this is an Alan Summer's haiku ;-)
For me this poem highlights how fragile any one of our lives is. I get a strong sense of the dislocation that occurs when something private and personal plays out in public. And the humanity of helping someone who is that vulnerable. Thanks for sharing.
Thanks Norah. The girl got better, though I also had to flag the ambulance down, as things were chaotic.
kind regards,
Alan
Thank you Lynne. I like 'hopeless arguments' because it highlights that moment when you realize it's futile to keep on arguing, or that the thing you are arguing about can't be resolved.
Thanks again.
Norah
Reading the little gems on tinywords have inspired me to improve my own haiku. There's just something so captivating about comparing human nature to that of mother nature – it makes you look at things differently.
So much conveyed in so few words. Perfectly crafted and a pure delight to read. :)
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