weeping plums –
another fight
about nothing

 

 

(previously appeared in the May 2014 issue of? a fine line, the magazine of the New Zealand Poetry Society)

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Norah Johnson

Norah Johnson is a writer, artist and yoga teacher. She lives in New Zealand and has been writing haiku for the last year. She is trying not to let haiku take over her life.

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    weeping plums –
    another fight
    about nothing

    —NORAH JOHNSON

    Well, what can I say? ;) This is a Norah Johnson haiku, even before I start to comment. ;)

    The concluding 'phrase' ramps up the first line, and vice versa. There's more than just poignancy, sadness, time lost and wasted, there is a chill in the poem to start the hairs on the back of our neck to start to rise.

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    street attack –
    I hold the young girl
    through her convulsions

    Alan Summers
    Publications credits: World Haiku Review vol. 2: Issue 3 (2002); Short Stuff vol 2, Issue 1, (2003)

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  2. Alan, thanks so much for your great comments :-) Love 'ramps up' – it captures the inexorable escalation of a bad argument.

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    street attack –
    I hold the young girl
    through her convulsions

    Alan Summers

    And this is an Alan Summer's haiku ;-)

    For me this poem highlights how fragile any one of our lives is. I get a strong sense of the dislocation that occurs when something private and personal plays out in public. And the humanity of helping someone who is that vulnerable. Thanks for sharing.

  3. Thank you Lynne. I like 'hopeless arguments' because it highlights that moment when you realize it's futile to keep on arguing, or that the thing you are arguing about can't be resolved.
    Thanks again.

    Norah

  4. Reading the little gems on tinywords have inspired me to improve my own haiku. There's just something so captivating about comparing human nature to that of mother nature – it makes you look at things differently.

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