a slow day
at the window
watching
an icicle repair
its broken parts
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Tish Davis
Tish Davis is an Ohio resident. She enjoys listening to Lake Erie and taking long walks through Lake County's gorgeous parks.
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a slow day
at the window
watching
an icicle repair
its broken parts
—TISH DAVIS
There are different types of tanka (and I'd call this a tanka and an accomplished one) that turn on certain lines, or have the strongest line just at the end.
There's a terrific turn midway with watching, and each line is loaded with tension, and all lines have that pacing, that page-turner effect that I admire so much.
There is so much resonance there in simple language and techniques that don't shout, but allow the poem to glow in its own light.
I'm deeply moved by this poem and all its wonderful meanings and layers that reward me every time I closely read this gem.
A wonderful tanka with expression depicting the simplicity of nature. The natural manifestation is poetically photographed in this poem. The 'shimo no ku' (last two lines) of the tanka portrays an image worth remembering. Let us discover mystical nature through its simplicity embedded within a divine feeling!
A slow day indeed!
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Tish Davis love this little poem image, Michael Lee Johnson, Itasca, IL poet.
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a slow day
at the window
watching
an icicle repair
its broken parts
—TISH DAVIS
There are different types of tanka (and I'd call this a tanka and an accomplished one) that turn on certain lines, or have the strongest line just at the end.
There's a terrific turn midway with watching, and each line is loaded with tension, and all lines have that pacing, that page-turner effect that I admire so much.
There is so much resonance there in simple language and techniques that don't shout, but allow the poem to glow in its own light.
I'm deeply moved by this poem and all its wonderful meanings and layers that reward me every time I closely read this gem.
warm regards,
Alan, With Words
A wonderful tanka with expression depicting the simplicity of nature. The natural manifestation is poetically photographed in this poem. The 'shimo no ku' (last two lines) of the tanka portrays an image worth remembering. Let us discover mystical nature through its simplicity embedded within a divine feeling!
A great sense of time captured in this, Tish. A little like waiting on inspiration to arrive sometimes! :)
marion